The dripping sound of the blood
To the ground it does rush
The bodies strewn there on the floor
My shadow overlapping their forms
The scent of decay fills the air
A woman’s intestines lay everywhere
The brains of a man slipping from his head
As he lay there dead on the bed
Fingers cut off at the finger tips
Placed in a bowl where there should be chips
The smell of vomit on the floor
A drunken man hidden behind the door
His tongue cut out
Before he could even shout
A woman’s body torn shred by shred
On a table rests her head
Glass driven hard through their skin
And their hands and feet in the garbage bin
Here I stand at this bloody scene
Thinking who have been this mean
A hard object I feel in my hand
Its handle feeling as gritty as sand
Looking down at my sticky fingers
In my mind this image lingers
Red liquid slipping down the silver blade
My sharp little friend that helped me in this raid
To bring death to all that’s here
As quick as glass can sever from the mirror
Author notes
I like to bite
A contest entry
- Dark Imagery by Uncle Haku.
300 points, ended May 20, 2006, 23 entries
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Honorable mention
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What did you think
Comments
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Wow, I love this! The imagery in this piece was amazing. I love a good gore poem, and this was great. It flowed very nicely as well...no pun intended . Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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love... its good and i really like it. love the name.
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Nice. Pretty interesting imagery you got here. Good luck.
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AH HAH!
now THIS is my kinda poem! love the detail. i got hooked lol. great job and i hope that i can find more like this!!! s!
later!
love Yami
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great work and great read thank you for joing and best of luck
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I love this so much :]
This is amazing.
I loved every bit of it.
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DARK MASTERPIECE
wow, this is great poem, i luv all of it.. you're talented, keep up the great work..
red roses
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Thank you for your comment and reading it. It's greatly appreciate it.
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this was a great write..i really enjoyed reading this..it flowed really well and was really talented..i liked the ending the best keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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this is a truly sickening write. I was almost going to stop reading it at one point. it was so descriptive and detailed in the bodies and the death....eww. gross. feels like I am watching texas chainsaw massacre...I love that movie...
awesome write.you have great talent.
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Wonderfully written... Gruesome, and disturbing... Especially that you can come up with something like this and still be the main character doing something to these people in the first place. Love how it turns from you being an innocent bystander to then the reader being shown that you are in fact the killer, and probably extremely mentally disturbed to one of the highest degrees. Well written.
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dang that was freaky! great job and good luck in my contest
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thats funny! may the best friend win... hmm.. i wonder who the better friend is? lol.... this is gonna be a toughy.. but im gonna laugh if neither of us get anything... i was gonna put in brun by my blade but that one has already won me enough contests.. thought id give another poem a chance...hehe.... im still stalking about for other dark contests that work...dundundundun... and please find something to enter my contest^.^ its open through sunday
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of course my dear, both you and your poem deserve it. ::hugs::
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Thanks I'm glad you like it and I'm glad the ending turned out how I wanted to. Thanks again for reading it.
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Wow, glad you like it, I appreciate you reading it. Thanks.
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Thank you I'm glad you like it!
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the bomb
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bravo, my dear. bravo.
i like this alot. very well expressed. lots of rage and pain.
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Excellent
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I have no idea whats up with Tony, he's been acting normal at school and I haven't been able to get on to your pro because for some reason I either remembered a different password or there was something wrong with the computer. Anywaays thatnx for commenting on my poem hun, I love ya!!!
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of course you know that i would love this poem... and you added in my weakness... damn you!lol... and i accidentally told tony what it is when i called him on the bus ride home today... but he has been acting really wierd... there was a dead silence on the phone and i asked if he was still there and he just said he had nothing to say... normally he would talk to me at least a bit... andi havent heard from him awhile... do you know if there is anything going on that is bugging him?.... oh... and i am seriously getting into chris lately.. ^.~... im gonna send him a secret admirer flower at school.. yea i know that sounds cheesy but oh well...
andi iwhs you luck in my contest... you have just as much chance winning as anyone else at this moment... except for a few.. they dont have any gore in them at all...
i shall talk to you tomorrow and thank you for adding my silver and bronze trophys when you get the chance^.^
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Amazing
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Thank you for reading it and I'm glad you love it! Greatly appreciated!
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Its hot, I love it!!!
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