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Your Key!

I give you a key,
This key is to a treasure chest,
Only one place I can suggest,
It’s deep inside of me.

If the key fits,
It’s yours to keep forever,
And you can do with it whatever you want,
But I’d rather you love me to bits.

Whenever you want to see inside,
You’ll see what you mean to me,
And that my love for you is a guarantee,
I’ll always be by your side.

When you look into my eyes,
You’ll see that I really need you,
And if I just gaze in your green eyes,
I can see why I need you more.

Whenever you’re around me,
My heart beats quicker every time you’re near,
This feeling will never disappear,
Yet it'so obvious to see.

So keep this key close to your heart,
Because that’s where I want to be!
And so you’ll never lose the key,
That opens the treasure chest deep inside my heart,
And whenever you’re in doubt,
Look at this key and remember it unlocks,
My love for you that lasts forever!

Author notes

This is a poem i've written for my gf, tell me wat you think, i'm going to give it to her for valentines day! any help would b GREAT!!!
Written February 7th, 2006

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  • Poison Angel
    November 21, 2007

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    Hey dude, looks like you havent been on here in ages and neither have i; but this poem is awesome. Reading this it looks like you've blossomed a lot from your older writings and it's impressive! Great flow and steady pace, excellent imagery - not too overwhelming. The only lines that need sml change are the ones that break the rhythm (ie. "my heart beats quicker..." & "that opens the treasure chest..."). Hope she liked the poem cos it's a stunner. Well done!


  • Seven Kinky
    October 8, 2007
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    I hope you didn't change a thing. This is one of the most romantic things I've ever read. If I had a boyfriend give me something like this for Valentine's Day, I might actually start liking the holiday. Wonderfully done. I hope you girlfriend liked it!

  • lovetheshadow
    February 8, 2006
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    awwwwwwwwwwww that is absolutely adorable. the poem and that your giving it to her as a gift. i wish i had a boyfriend to give me a poem. that's all a girl needs to love a guy forever. nice job


  • February 7, 2006
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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwww. Oh my god that is cute. Aww shes so lucky.. This is really REALLY beautiful. She will LOVE it.
    Keep writing and take care
    <3 C xxxxxxxxx