she looked at me and said
Im sick of being me
can I crawl out of my skin
and find something new.
I wanna get in my car and drive
dont wanna stop till i cant go on
I'm just so tired of feeling the way I do.
I wanna scream at the top of my lungs
hit the walls till they break
throw this tantrum thats been building up inside.
I cant stand the feeling
of myself anymore
Can I just let go and see where I fall?
I looked at her and tried to find
the words, anything to ease her mind
but i couldnt think of anything to say
Author notes
It was kind of a rough day and so i just started writing. i dont think it's done, but i just didnt know how to finished it, or what else to say.
S
Written February 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- silent screams we make by moonburndcheese.
300 points, ended February 4, 2008, 34 entries
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i really enjoyed reading this and i thank you for entering in my contest and sometimes i hate being me to...I
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Bravo
Yup, I like this one also. I've been on both sides of that fence before; wishing I could just be someone else just for a little while, or just get in the car and drive. I've also found myself trying to comfort someone and not having a clue what I could say that would actually help. -
she doesn't need a makeover physically to get friends. If thats the case she shouldn't want those kind of people in her life anyway.
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Didn't know what to say? Hey! She just needs a makeover! New hair color, hair style, new outfit, makeup, and a night out having fun! And if she does all that...she'll end up with a whole new buncha friends! So just hug her and tell her she's cool, totally.
This poem so very truly dances and I love it!
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For not know what to say, you said it really well...
emotions I'm sure many can relate to.
Great job
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Everyone wishes they were somebody else sometimes. There's not much else to say. Don't change the poem. It's a good piece. I like it.
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i've felt this a lot but my friends help me through...i wish i just go into the woods and smash sticks and stuff to vent my anger..it was a better decision than cutting....
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I feel like this. Alot. I never want to be myself. ppl call me lost. i guess thats what i am. but this..this hits home...i really did love it. I understand it..everyword. I loved the flow..and the meaning.
Keep up the good work
Love Always
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I feel this way alot...wishing I could disappear. Or that I was someone else...maybe more interesting, funny, loveable, and that sort of thing...If I'm not careful It can really bring me down..but you expressed yourself very well in this poem. It happens to be one of my new favorites.
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Beautifully Written!
Wow....thats how i feel a lot....but i have had a lot going on in my life lately..but i sometimes wish that i could just get into my car and go and never stop until i cant go anymore....anyways....this was an awesome poem!!! wonderfully written and very...hmm...what's the word....descriptive? lol...yes...very descriptive! GREAT JOB! -
I'm glad you wrote about your feelings. Your emotions shine through in your poem. It is written with intensity! What you're experiencing is not that uncommon. I have had the same feeling at times. Probably many have. I call it being uncomfortable in my own skin. The good thing is-it will pass. Peace be with you.
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Interesting take good poem overall and well written I can understand the lack of words to be spoken there are times when we are all at a loss for words
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I do not want you to feel alone in this. I am sure that most of us have felt this way at one time or another for whatever reason. Fortunately most of us do not act on it-and at the end it all turns out just fine. but you did a great job at expressing how you want to escape it all ( even if for just one day)I do hope things get better for you....writing about it alone is already a great catharsis
reenie
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i liked it, i havnt read many poems where its a person whos listening to someone talk like this rather than actually saying it, so to read it in this context was cool, great job
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wow. really thought provoking...great work. powerful.
i agree with others, this has feeling that cannot be expressed directly, but it still reaches out and expresses it extremely well.
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i liked thios i thought it was really quite good.. i like the way you express yourself.. you express yourself in a very clear and understandable way which i think is good here ~toni~
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This poem makes you wonder. I feel sorry for the girl who hates herself. I also feels sorry for her friend who has nothing to say to comfort her friend. It's like i can see myself in their position, being left silent when that person needs your words most. It's amazing how a poem like this can make your mind wonder.
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I think this is a write many can relate to, even if they are not writers. I know I can relate to this.
You have stated, so well, what many of us feel, if not all of us. There have been many times I don't want to be the me I believe I see.
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This piece really captures that feeling of frustration and disatisfaction ... we have all experienced it - a time when you would give anything to be someone other yourself ... you expressed it well! Thanks for sharing.
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nice write
real nice, like this just as it is the ending is the end with nothing to say I like it alot I wouldn't change a thing, lots of truth is in it. keep on writing and have a great day -
I love ti I think you are really talented nad becaus eI can really relate to the girl in this poem I just LOve it . Any ways, Awesome write and I really don't hink you should add anything. Because it is perfect as it is, then againperfection can always be improved. So go you and add more if you like, do what your artist lil heart tells you.
Cassie -
Well I can think of a lot of things to say. First of all please stop feeling this way. Be proud of yourself, for I am proud of you for writing such a touching poem. You keep writing you are just that good. You mean the world to someone, don't break that someones heart. Keep writing Baby and keep sharing that pen. I loved this sad brings tears to one eyes poem.
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totally fine poem!
I would tell her to reinvent herself. It is easy. You get a makeover with new makeup and hair style and clothes. Then you do one new thing that you never did before, every single day for one week. By then you are totally reinvented. People are amazed at the new you and you might even change your career and you might even get a new boy friend...but if this poem was written by the old boyfriend, please disregard the last part.
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This is pretty good. I think a lot of people feel this way sometimes. I don't think I ever have, although there are things about me that I would probably change if I could. Anyway, this is pretty good.
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I think this is a great write, so emotional, it kinda hits close to home right now. Not only am i severely depressed but someone i care about so much and told me she almost killed herself last night and sense im not there, i had no idea what to say to her.. except i made sure she knew exactly how i felt about her. so thank you for inspiring me even further and thanks for having the magic touch to brighten my day. luv sue
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Wow this was soo good! I can completely relate to everything you said in the poem... it flowed so nicely and was just really really well done! Great job and keep up the good work
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This is a great poem. You did a great job on it keep up the good work and thanks for sharing with all of us on allpoetry if you ever need someone to talk to about anything im here.
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what a great poem
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i think it's good and i don't know if you shoul leave it as is or add more. bad days really do suck but that's when i before very creative and write some good stuff so in a way i hope i have bad days (that's just sad)
good write and keep up the good work
Flood Fury
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It is a great start!! I think you should end it with a bit of hope!!
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