Beauty is the piece of glass
I hold in my hand
It cuts me-
But I cannot let it go.
Author notes
Written February 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- What is Real Beauty to You? by Miss Splenda.
300 points, ended February 19, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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of course i remember you. where have you been?
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seems like...an obvious thing. that might be good. i wonder what your writings up to these days.
btw, remember me? -
Cool. I wrote a poem called the same thing. I like yours. Shancy.
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Yes, that is one of the rules, but it was added after this pome was entered.
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No offense, but I thought one of the rules was also, NO CUTTING.
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bravo
she is. real beauty -
Very good!
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GOOD JOB!!!!! :F
This is short and is clear, well written, thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest, AngelicMistress -
i read and re-read this its stunning
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This says a lot that it doesn't say! Um very thought provoking. I used to cut myself up and have always thought knives very beautiful, this poem reminds me of that.
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short and sweet
First of all, allow me to thank you for being the first entrant in my competition.
Moving on...
I feel the simplicity of this piece worked out well. The ending is my favourite part. Along the lines of constructive criticism- this poem is very easily understood (which goes against my no straightforward poetry rule) and if it would be possible, a little more content and a more metaphorical sense would not hurt. Know, though, that this piece has it's own personality if you will, and feel free to leave it to your liking.
I'm not sure if this is the kind of beauty I was referring to, but nonetheless, this is a good poem. Short and sweet. Nice title, by the way, and once again- thank-you very much for entering.
~Splenda Enhanced~
Edited on Feb 06, 1:39 p.m. because ''. -
This is a sad piece. Beauty can be something dreadful to!
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