Why does it hurt so much
To see the two lovers touch
They deserve to be happy
But what aout me
Once again I stepped aside
She asked if I'd be OK, I lied
I'm in a great deal of pain
With nothing to gain
I have to shut my eyes
Blink back tears when I cry
No one sees my sorrow
At night I weep getting ready for tomorrow
I'm like a third wheel
They don't notice how I feel
I die a little inside
Everytime I see them walk by
I pray she misses me
That she'll realize she should have chosen me
I'm in love with her
But my feelings don't matter
Will she ever wonder what if
My life is teatering on the edge of a clif
I don't know what to say
My feelings don't matter anyway
Author notes
I fall in love so deeply and so fast that I always get hurt... she thinks it's nothing more then a crush or because she pays attention to me... anyone that knows me should know that's not how I am.
Written February 6th, 2006
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Hi! Beautiful sad poem. I am sorry you are hurting.Each of us has to go through this at some point in our lives its never easy. But remember for every heart break we become the caring people we are. And true love will come when you are not searching for it.Hang in there.
Loretta -
Excellent
I've been in those shoes,and they aren't a comfortable fit.There are no easy answers.If you're like me you'd rather see her happy then your self, and boy does that suck. You have to do what you can live with. Either tell her you love her or don't. I hope you chose well and good luck.
The poem was beautiful and easy to read. I liked it very much.
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very good
Excellent poem.I liked it.Nice touch of feelings
and good flow.I got nice imagery as
"I'm like a third wheel
They don't notice how I feel
I die a little inside
Everytime I see them walk by
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yup i know just how u feel its happend to me before and it sux..i think its worse when they dont seem to notice or dont care if they do your right..im sorry and i hope u feel better about it soon....but ur peom what really great i loved it ..so full of love and sadness at the same time i could really feel it all whilst i was reading it. your really tallented this was a wonderful heartfelt piece..great work and thanks for sharing
hope u feel better soon
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This is one of your best poems yet. You really put your heart into it and the rhyming was very good.
I miss you Luna, and i'm sad that things aren't going good for you. You have had to endure a lot, and you truly deserve to be happy. I still don't know how both of the "two lovers" became lovers in the first place, and because it looks like my ability to talk to you has effectively been disabled, i probably never will know.
How two people who you care for, could do that to you, i don't know.
Just know that although we are growing apart, i'll always remember you, and your feelings will always matter to me. -
-anyone that knows me- maybe that is just it, maybe she doesn't really know you. I am sure that it is difficult to see the woman you feel you love walking with someone else...I think this is a good poem, it could be great, but to me it seemed like it ended to abruptly.. like it needed one more stanza to make it complete.
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Loves turmoil express well. Allow your feelings to matter and there you will see changes begin. You and your feelings must matter! Heart touching and easy to relate to. Enigma
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Speak up my dear poet.......Tell the other person just like you express it here in your poem.....This poem would be a great start.....I really liked this pen........It showed deep emotions and feelings that one really feels..i like the meter and it really did touch my heart....
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Great job.
Smiles your way >>>Sandy San-d
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Ohhhh!!! This is so incredibly sad!!! I know how you feel. I have a bad habit of falling too far and too fast, as well. I love this poem because it states how I feel, so much. You have an amazing talent! Great write!
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Hey...i like this....I'm sorry you have to go through this but all these replies should help some....
anyway I liked the rhyme and rythm of this piece, it wavered a bit but that added some spice to it.
"Why does it hurt so much
To see the two lovers touch
They deserve to be happy
But what aout me"
I love that last line that's kind of just letting them know you're still there, and I loved the whole thing overall. nice work, me give you thumbs up! -
beautiful work...i too can relate ive lost love before. it feels like youre dying. my favorite part was
I have to shut my eyes
Blink back tears when I cry
No one sees my sorrow
At night I weep getting ready for tomorrow
i just really loved it and this part just struck a chord with me. i guess because ive cried myslef to sleep too much. anyway the world moves on and if you get left behind in your sorrows you just seem to dissapear within yourslef. keep writing it was truely wonderful
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your poetry is truly amazing, this was an absolutly beautiful piece, i get in these situations to, right now i feel like no one is ever going to love me, i live in a small town with not much to choose from, i've dated every decent guy here, (that leaves maybe 4)and everyone of them has hurt me to the point where i feel like im going to be alone forever, well anyways great job, dont ever stop writing ur work is beautiful..
imnot
echo_959@msn.com -
Love seems to hurt us more often than not.....it's amazing how people are so much alike, but very different. Your poem expresses your anxiety and frustration. Sounds as though you've been let down quite a few times. Great job on this....I enjoyed reading it.
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isnt it hell when you fall in love and they dont see it - when your emotions are toyed with and broken in a blink of an eye --
i loved this because it was honest you didnt try to pritty it up it was raw and from the heart
gold stars to you
beka -
sad
"I have to shut my eyes
Blink back tears when I cry
No one sees my sorrow
At night I weep getting ready for tomorrow
I'm like a third wheel
They don't notice how I feel
I die a little inside
Everytime I see them walk by"
This portion effects me most, i've been through the same thing, everytime i see my ex and his current gf i feel the same. You did a good job expressing your feelings, but think of this way could you be better off with out her? prolly cause if she could hurt you now couldent she have hurt you more at a later date? anyways i hope things get better for you
Edited on Feb 09, 2:47 because ''.
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