The Doll In The Window
Standing near a department store
Waiting for people to pass.
A little girl was standing there,
Her nose pressed to the glass.
In the window was a dolly,
Dressed in all its' finery.
"I really like that dolly,
I wish she belonged to me.
I would take good care of her.
I would guard her with my life.
Not let the bad men hurt her,
Or cause her any strife.
Mommy says they're only playing,
They don't mean any harm.
But, why do I feel so cold inside,
It seems I can't get warm?
Mommy said not to tell anyone.
People won't understand.
Why does she let them hurt me?
I hate the feel of their hand.
My mommy says she loves me.
But, she never holds me tight.
She stays so busy with her friends,
When they stay overnight.
She said my daddy didn't want us.
He just wanted to be free.
Why is it so hard to love
A little girl like me?
Dolly, I know I'm only six years old.
But,I know just what to do.
To keep you safe and happy,
And prove that I love you.
Mommy says Santa can't come this year.
There are too many girls and boys.
Some of his elves have been sick,
And couldn't make a lot of toys.
I've never had a doll before,
Nor anyone to care.
Maybe some other little girl,
Her love, with you, will share."
As she turned to walk away.
The tears ran down her face.
I knew just what I had to do.
I followed to her place.
Another year has come and gone.
At the window, the little girl stands.
Another doll, in all its' glory
Was nothing like the one in her hands.
She has a home, a brand new life,
And love that she lets flow
Onto the doll held in her arms.
I'm her new mommy, I should know.
Author notes
Written February 5th, 2006
A contest entry
- Once More I speak to unsilence the issue by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
6000 points, ended March 8, 2008, 42 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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This is wonderfully written.
All the best,
C a n d y
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Absolutely WONDERFUL
Thank you for writing and sharing this.
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Awwww how wonderful this is.
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"Standing near a department store
Waiting for people to pass.
A little girl was standing there,
Her nose pressed to the glass"
by these lines i can imagine that girl in my mind
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This is such a sweet poem. I felt really sad for the little girl when she did not feel loved. you expressed it brilliant!
Lana
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*More Tears*
I love this peom, it is so sweet. I know what it feels like, to not think they care. But that dolly made her happy, along with her new mommy. Please keep writing, the stories that make my tears. -
A very sweet poem Darlee. I see these poor children on the TV and I would love to bring them all home it is heart breaking what some children have to go through.
Your poem has highlighted a bane of our society in tender way.
Cherry xxx
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Darlee this was so touching
What a beautiful doll story for a little girl your heart if believe in this poem
I think when you wrote you with thinking of your mom. It was sad but so sweet and lovely
Blessing
Sharon
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Very nice and touching poem. The real story is well built within your good flowing verses. Thank you and good luck.
~Sonja~
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Tears...... Silent tears ran down my face as i read this....
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this one speaks on so many levels for me...I understood it completely. I got to be a mommy with 8 dollies to hold congrats to you on the bronze blessings always~ Trisha
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Thanks!
I really appreciate the great message. Thank you so much.
I was surprised to receive the bronze. Thanks, again. God bless. Darlee77
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this brought me to tears it reminded me of alot and just wow the depth to each line and emotion was amazing well done
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Thanks so much.
Thank you for choosing my poem. It is an honor.I really appreciate you. Darlee77 -
Thank you.
I appreciate the wonderful review. This is one of my favorites. I am really honored you liked it. Darlee77
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Thank you very much for the lovely comments. Darlee77
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Thank you very much. Darlee77
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No, this is not a personal experience. God just put it on my heart to write it. People need to be aware of the number of children out there just like this. Darlee77
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Thank you for the wonderful review. There are so many kids out
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One of the very best!
Wow, usually these kinds of poems have lots of emotion but aren't too good as poems themselves-writing, structure etc.
But this is EXCELLENT. Emotion, flow, ryhme everything. Great imagery. Can't find a thing to change! -
Awww this was so cute i loved the imagenry of it such an amazing poem darling
best wishes melisa
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Wow! You captured my attention and you held it. creative, descriptive and tender.
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it made me cry. omg....i have tears in my eyes. i saw where this was going..meaning the little girl not finding love at home, when she started talking baou how she would take care of her. great imagery at the glass, as she stared at the door.
and what a beautiful ending. this is very touching. if i may ask, is this a true storypersonal? -
I guess I do. Little boys, too. Thank you. Darlee77
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Very nice write. You seem like a very passionate person...you seem to really have a thing for little unloved girls.
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Thank you so much. So many kids out there like this. Darlee77
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omg...this really moved me...i absolutely love it!
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Thank you. There are so many children out there like this one.
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Aww. This poem is very emotional, and I like how you put all those feelings into words. A child's pain of having nobody to love, and wanting a doll to love and hold, to have as their very own. great work.
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