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Mount Paradis (Quatrain Refrain)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

On top Mount Paradis, I view white virgin land--
Will I -- my friend’s dream house -- see built, before I die?
This afternoon I saw my winter wonder sand,
’Mong  flurry white snow drops -- I kiss in silver skies.

Yesterday morn’, I woke to view a white-tail deer --
My rural road he stands,  as I reach out my hand.
He pauses, gazes -- Kodak op -- shows no fear,
On top Mount Paradis, I view white virgin land --

Summertime, I view a garter -- slither through grass:
My symbolic fear -- as I watch my end draw nigh,
Think – mortal temple;  free, please -- this tortured pained mass
Will I -- my friend’s dream house -- see built, before I die?

This summer, I spent my pain free days toiling earth
My friend -- my condition – I know he understands
I have been told -- been dis-eased --  the day I was birth
This afternoon I saw my winter wonder sand

I have seen his dream so I think now I can go
In peace, joy, tranquility and freedom I’ll rise
Towards Mount Paradis -- my  new released soul flows
’Mong  flurry white snow drops -- I kiss in silver skies.

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Written February 4th, 2006

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  • Manoj Sanyal
    March 24, 2006
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    My comments as collaborator:
    Excellent poem.
    Final decision shall be taken by contest maker, “lifeisjazzy”
    Best wishes and good luck.


  • angelica silver member
    February 5, 2006
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    I knew that my dear Bro, just making sure you KNOW IT!!


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 5, 2006
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    Joan, my beautiful auzzie We both know I am not departing yet, but I have an innate feeling to release these feelings or they eat me away. I also wrote this for Alain tonight to show him how much I really loved that I was able to part of building his dream this summer. It matured me over the months as I dealt with everything and you know what, I told you I was going to win the battle and look who is still here! *Sorry, inside joke and if you need to know, well all the evidence lies within some of my poems! Gregg
    Edited on Feb 05, 1:17 because ''.

  • angelica silver member
    February 5, 2006
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    My dear Gregg, Ohh the house is coming along wonderfully, I'll be looking forward to seeing it when it's finished. Your Quantrain is wonderful. You have seen your dream come true with the near completion of your house you're building with your friend. but don't think because it's almost done that you're going to leave me..forget it pal..no way! You still have a lot of work ahead of you, that's another dream you'll complete, got it! I'm so proud of you my dear Brother for what you've accomplished in the time that I've known you. Well done..Bravo my Bro!
    Love from your
    aussie Sister
    Joan