I ain't able to cry anymore
There's nothing left inside
Just heavy feelings to the core
And these I try to hide
But where should the tears
Come from at all?
Inside me, there's a hole...
The pain's just driving me insane
And taking my control
I try to find a way to free me
Everything leads to the blade
The knife is already too near me
I remember every cut I made
Author notes
Written February 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- the black hole were your soul used to be by nobody knows me.
750 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
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for getting into the finalists x
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Thankyou for entering my contest this was a good poem good luck x
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interesting, you let your feelings out here so great, i can see that you can't hold them in anymore, so they come out but laid in a superb poem like this, well done in expressing yourself..all your work are so attractive, i like the way you write!!!
But where should the tears
Come from at all?
Inside me, there's a hole...
The pain's just driving me insane
And taking my control
Nice write... -
I agree the last verse is both heart-rendering and disturbing. Love, trust and our feelings about ourselves make us human, but also make us vunerable. Each person should feel secure in their own mind and be free from harm. However, I believe not one individual on this earth is truly satisfied with their life, and those who state in the affirmative are partially delusional. Inequality exists throughout the world in terms of suffering, physical and mental abuse, food, money, etc. I believe some people don't care how they treat other individuals'in their own pursuit of power, corruption, money and pleasure. Regards.
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once again your peoms kickass....
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Your a great writer. Hope the pain dulls abit, but not enough to loose the muse.
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This poem was beautiful. And I can relate to this a great deal. This poem was packed with emotion, and my favorite lines were "I try to find a way to free me
Everything leads to the blade
The knife is already too near me
I remember every cut I made " Yup those were it. Keep up the awesome writing!
Isabel
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thank you, I'm sorry you've been there,... '___'
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Wow, another nice poem! I like it a lot. I'm sorry to say I'm not going to applaud it because it brought back a lot of bad memories. Trust me I'm not a steriotype that thinks people that cut themselves need a life. It's just one of my good friends, does it..and she doesn't get that I've been there, so I don't read her work any more cuz it brings back memories. Okay I'm sorry crazy. Nice write!
Jamie
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Strong and moving
Very emotional and honest,Very creative again yet sad,The words are just so beautiful and expressive
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Thank you for the comment. I really appreciate it.
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I don't quite understand the need to cut, but I know it is a very real urge that plagues so many. Like displaced pain. I feel for you and your writing captured that sorrow that accompanies those feelings so well. I see you are new to the site~welcome, nice to have you join us.
vj
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