Love is......
The quickening of the heart,
rose-flushed cheeks aflame.
Star-bright eyes that light
your smile.
The smile that leaves
me breathless.
Pain is......
The last moments of this
rendezvous and final
agony of parting.
Tears welling, overflowing,
salt-smarting on my face.
This is our finale.
We, shall be no more.
Author notes
Written February 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- What is Love? by killthequeen425.
300 points, ended July 31, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is... by Dusty.
513 points, ended April 27, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MY SECOND CONTEST ON THE THEME ‘FAREWELL’. by karabi.
800 points, ended September 3, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I agree with dusty, this poem is simply amazing, whether it is true love or not, it shows the thin line where lust and love connect, and confuse the world with it's tricked dice. Keep up the great work, and good luck in the poem
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God you made my heart hurt with this one it struck a cord inside and made me look upon my own hurt.
this is a real love poem I feel it with every letter and word used I loved it it was simly perfection of poetry and love.
Ella
Dusty
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Thanks for reading and commenting, glad you liked it.
Ann -
short and sweet poems are my favorite....but this is kindof short and sour.....EVEN BETTER! i love the way you set the poem up because love is pain...sometimes.....great write and good luck in the contest!
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Thanks , glad you like it. It's short but says quite alot!
Ann -
Perfect beginning and ending poem. I liked this a lot.
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Excellent
I liked this - very direct pointed and crisp. -
Thanks for applause and your comments. Yes, I deliberately kept it short to emphasise the contrasts of the emotions. I think it would have been lost if I'd waffled on too much. In general though my poetry tends to be short, nothing much over thirty odd lines usually.
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at first I thought that it would be better if you followed up and did more stanzas on different emotions. but after thinking to myself about what you wrote I realized that love and pain are the two roots of all emotions, and are therefore the most important and need only themselves. I love how simply yet acurately you captured such deep emotions. good poem.
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Thanks so much for your positive comments, glad you like it.This poem is very personal to me and written straight from the heart but I think most people will have experienced these emotions.
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I have the tendancy to read critical poems, so I chose this one.
This is really good, I like the emotion in this piece. It's like comparing and contrasting black and white, silver and gold. Very neat take on the poem. Good luck in the contest!
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