I'm tired of all this fighting, now I writing
My head is spinning for now I'm not winning
I'm lost, confused, alone and afraid
Have our bonds broken, become so frayed?
Remember the nights, pretty star light
As if nothing else matters, fears just shatter
In case you've moved on, searching a new dawn
I need you to realize this, it's only you I miss
I'm just here, looking into my hidden fears
While outside its raining, my soul I'm shaming
The sun soon rise, but my in my mind echo those cries
Is it just me, wanting to be set so free?
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wrote this first mod today (practicl law, bla!) and it just came out like this, like most my poems.
Written February 3rd, 2006
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i liked the wording of some lines, but not all. it just doesn't feel like you were inspired when you wrote it. and you shouldn't use "so" much (like in the last line, "so free")... i kind of removes the bit of creativity... and don't put words if you don't think they sound good in the poem... speak from your heart, like it feels the words are coming from your soul... or some other cliche like that... i know it sounds cheezy, but it's true. the deeper in you dig, the more personal and touching the poem.
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