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The Small Part of Allergic Reactionaries

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Beautiful wings without sky, until
Everything’s’ quiet outside.
Eventually, nothing astounds the truly free.
Stars crying out from underground,  (how curious)
Tired earthquake (in their) eyes create
Intrigued passers-by, because

No
God
Surrounds them.

To think outside of the box,
You gotta have a box to think outside of.

Maybe
Atheists need a God to not believe in.

Author notes

Laws without gravity.  What a concept.
Written February 3rd, 2006

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  • raggyann
    January 6, 2008
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    this is fuel to the fire to me your message
    and we poets do live ouside of the box


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 24, 2006
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    That sounds like an interesting place (the Loft, so why not go....there is a place here in Annapolis "the Blue Moon Cafe" but it has changed hands and is not quite the same . Actually in real life I know very few people that either read or write poetry . Or if they do , they keep it a secret ...naaaaa, I can usuaaaly smell a kindred spirit a mile away
    xoxoxo
    reenie


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    February 24, 2006
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    I like how you free-flow with thought. I wish I could meet the few poets I connect with. Maybe I'll eventually find a local poet I can connect with. That would be cool. I'm thinking of going to poetry classes at The Loft (a local literary outfit). MAYBE...LOL!


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 24, 2006
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    I believe it makes sense to my own interpretation (especially the last line), for I can take it to mean a million things ....as long as there is something fueling our fires of thought, we keep living and searching and accepting that one thing that it is (with all the variousnesses of its form) we adapt and re-adapt...for we are a part of it. And that is not one single thing , (not the same thing to all)It is the grain of salt that makes us become an entire sand-mine(for we have a box<----no pun intended on sandbox ), but rather one where we breathe in and out.....a foundation of being and believing....? Now , this comment makes sense to me , I am just wondering if it does to you or anyone else. Such is the downfall of trying to put thought to paper or keyboard , without being able to change the words to mean the same , but explain better......
    xoxoxo
    reenie


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    February 23, 2006
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    Spellcheck says it's right, but that's no a guarantee. I am a lousy speller. As far as the confusing item, maybe it's because the truth of the contradiction is so apparent, it is clearly ambiguous. It's a little like the saying, "Alcohol gave me wings to fly. Then it took away the sky."


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    February 23, 2006
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    Maybe I should have poetized the last part, I don't know. I laughed when I wrote it 'as is', so I thought to let it stand. It was indeed a secret Epigram. Wondered if anyone would comment on that. Thanks.


  • Pretty Little Thing
    February 23, 2006
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    forgot this...


  • February 23, 2006
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    I like

    Picture is cool and creepy at the same time. Love the line "Tires earthquake (in their) eyes.
    Confused by line "Everything's' quiet outside"
    Was the 's' intentional or a type-o

  • karabi
    February 23, 2006
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    VERY GOOD

    Is it an epigram or a full-fledged poem? A brain teaser perhaps.


  • Pretty Little Thing
    February 23, 2006
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    Extremely well done.

    I fucking love your poem. This is thought-provoking, and uses powerful words for dramatic effect. Extremely well done.

  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    February 23, 2006
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    Read it again...see if it makes more sense now (when you get time, please).


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    February 23, 2006
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    Kikidee~It's not for or against people who believe in God (HP). It's addressing the paradox of non-belief/belief, and how people react to the stings of "other" opinions.


  • Kikidee6971
    February 23, 2006
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    Very good

    I thought the picture was very interesting.Is this for or against people who do or do not believe in a higher power? Please let me know and the write will become more clear for me. Thanks Kikidee


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 3, 2006
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    you did it...you lost me completely but then again maybe that was your intention, as this write seems to be sort of lost in the weird wwhere you aptly paced it...and the picture...yyyyyyyeeeekes, gave me the chicken-bumps (somewhat smaller than goosebumps) (I am little) Now i will have nightmares about this picture....
    xoxo
    reenie


  • luckynsincere
    February 3, 2006
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    How great this is? I loved it!
    My favorite line:

    Stars crying out from underground, (how curious)

    that is a unique line! i love the feel that this gave... your ending is powerful and lingers with the reader for a bit. Thanks for sharing another brillant write dear friend.
    Meli

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