honesty
raindrops on window
unlatched
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Written February 2nd, 2006
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enjoyed this - it was descriptive, and peaceful in the short space of words.
I'm hopeless at writing Haiku's so I enjoy reading them all the more
thanks for sharing with us =)
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that's pretty
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epigram
so short and witty
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Wow. Beautiful. I really liked this haiku. It did what a haiku is suppose to do ~ it paints a picture in your head with such few words... And then lets your mind wander. Which 'unlatched' I believe is a perfect ending because you have to think it over again.
Wonderful job, though ~
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excellent work
very simple and complete haiku tends to be a difficult for most. awesome work
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I love it, unlatched that made me think for a moment or two, but great job. The backgroud was beautiful and flowers coming out and the asian people at the left. I say asian cause I can't tell the difference of people from Japan and China anymore
Haiku peoms are just too short don't you think?
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I think this one must be wasted on me as I can really see where the honest y is related into the rest of the piece and I would prefer a word like intrusion for example.
Also the use of two one word lines that do not grammaticaly link in with the second line also hinders this piece, it's certainly a good starting poin, but lacks something I fell unfortunately. -
thank you sie for looking in...larry
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I find your haiku's very interesting indeed I look forward to reading more. I too have a love for them as well. This one was well done. ~Sie
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It's like your among friends and there all talking openly that would be nice
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REMARKABLE!!!!!!!
I truly admire people who write haiku because you are able to embarce such a big topic and condense it down to three lines. And you have to be precise. What else is there to say but you are remarkable!!!! I would really appreciate if you would read/comment on some of my work also. -
thank you poet for looking in...larry
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I loved this
great write keep up the good work!
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thank you joey for looking in on my work...larry
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Awesome
hey
at first glance it seems very short and not something to want to read. but once one really, really reads it this is so wonderful. the words captured me. i also like how you love to write haiku's. dont see much of those anymore. but yes i love this poem with such simple short words it can express a lot. well done.
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All i can say is
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thank you ros..I seem to be the only one who like's the word among...in this...can be read without though...thanks again...larry
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The honesty is among the raindrops.They may fall but the honesty remains, Ros
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thank you leander for your comments and suggestion...larry
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I somewhat agree with Anna on this one... I think trimming this one down a little bit and taking among out of it, would give even a greater image
thank you for entering!
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thanks liz...larry
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Larry this to me is a well crafted and interesting haiku. good work...keep it up.
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If Pam had not explained this Haiku to me, I would not have understood this one. The word "among" put me completely on the wrong track. Since I know now what it says, I think it is great. It could do without the word "among" though. Good luck in the Contest Larry.
Anna.
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thank you pam...will see you soon...larry
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Wow. I could go a million places with this beautiful Haiku. I has magic within it. LOVED this. ~Pam
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This is so wonderful dear Larry. I'm glad that at least I can read your poems in the contests.
Sorry,I don't have enough points to applaud you.
Shahrzad
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