all this time,
i've been trying
to die,
but the answer,
what i was
really seeking,
oblivion,
was here
all the time
in a bong,
little deaths
with every drag
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Written February 2nd, 2006
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I felt a little bit sad, even tho there is the possibility that it is not more than a a poetic fiction. You ae so young!
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Oh, but I feel so old.
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Would that I had your years!
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this write, although very descriptive and full of talent fills me with such sadness... don't give in, you've friends here, talk to them by messaging...don't waste this deep talent we see flow! *hugs*
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Ah, sweet sweet drug, to numb the pain and make everything seem like its not a big deal... I hope this isn't personal but if it is, you know I am here for you no matter what ... I have missed your writes so! You are a brillant person, poet and friend... don't ever forget that!
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Powerful
Well this is an interesting write. Though I don't think the answers are there. A short write expressing pain and depression. A powerful write. Love it. Keep writing.
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Think it would be better to read 'that' I was really seeking. An otherwise contrite works, with a message of feelings/emotion experienced by the writer portrayed to the point. Well written but a shame if you do feel that way you; have much talent here don't waste it!! I'm new so please review my work honestly in return!!Keep writing my friend putting you on favouries!
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well i dont much care for drugs, though i have friends that do. but the idea of this poem, of the despiration, comes through. i like it, good work
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This is quite a short poem that you have written here and you managed to express your feelings and thoughts very clearly through the few lines you've used...
I missed some more images to be honest, but that is my pet peeve so yah
Keep it up!
Leander
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Very nicely done, it reads very well! it was there all the time!
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Oooooh.
Talk about my theme poem.
I LOVE this one.
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WOW i love flow this poem and the rhyme and rythem! Keep up the good work and I hope you will stop by my page!
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I really enjoyed this write and especially the last lines"little deaths with every drag" This alone says so much. Powerful!
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wow i love how you worded this poem. it has such a flow that not many people can bring to a poem. nie job.
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Great poem.
I really enjoyed reading the last part:
"little deaths
with every drag."
Keep it up!
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The rythym of the bong is not a song to sing, aye it is the dance of a slow death, faceing these truth in the light of day with a clear mind and the fortitude of strength to resolve them, aye thats the key, live , learn, and grow my friend
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