Stick your fingers down your throat - I promise I won't watch
oh, but that's what you do it for - I forgot.
Your ego has taken on a life of it's own
to honestly think I care enough about what size dress you wear?
If your words are shallow and pre-scripted - do you really expect me to listen?
Are you truly that caught up in yourself that you think I would trade in my morality and beliefs for YOU?
Vote for whomever for YOU?
Buy your moronic music with your pointless lyrics for WHO?
I am woman - hear me snore...
You bore me with your words
(actually, I believe they are someone elses, but that's what makes it worse).
Do you remember a distant time when people were real
with real messages and real physiques
real reasons to be... real?
I WON'T fall prey to your "message".
I WON'T be fooled by your "Agenda" (for I read you like a book).
I WON'T buy your CD (even with the catchy hook).
For I am real.
I am who I am.
Who are you?
(Speak your mind - not someone elses)
Author notes
Hee hee - venom... I guess I wrote this as a woman who is just plain tired of being told via commercials and music etc., what I should look like, what I should dress like, who I should be, when the whole time, I like what I listen to, I like the way I dress, I like having a mind of my own and my own opinions to express.... That's all Folks...
Written February 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Leave me with an open mouth, and a loss for words. by PINBALLxMASQUERADE.
300 points, ended July 15, 2006, 46 entries
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good.
To be honest this seems a bit more like a statement than a poem, however you did have a point in your words. -
"Stick your fingers down your throat - I promise I won't watch
oh, but that's what you do it for - I forgot."
These were two very well written lines. as well as these:
"I am woman - hear me snore...
You bore me with your words
(actually, I believe they are someone elses, but that's what makes it worse).
this gave it something else very unique. The message in your poem is a great one..it is very true that the media send out a strong message of who and what the perfect woman should be..
but in reality none of us are..not even the stars..
"For I am real.
I am who I am.
Who are you?"
These were threee powerful lines to finish off the poem excellently. You are a very talented writter and i hope you keep writting!
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that's good true but i find it pointless to try fighting everything since it's already taken over more than 99% of the world but that's just me. you can keep trying! and if you can find a good reason for me to keep fighting as well than i will. i'm not saying all this to be mean either i just feel like saying how i feel that's all really kool poem! loved it
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You go girl !!
We all need to be like this.
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Incredibly Powerful
Incredibly powerful piece of writing. Conforming to the idea of what someone thinks they should be, goes against every fibre of individuality. Nice write.
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Hell yea, slam poet here. I loved it. Fu** "em all. Good write -
How dare you like what you like. Don't you realise that this is the 21st century, we have perfected advertising over the past 100 years and you think you can go and retain free will? Don't be silly.
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Good
Amen sister. As a christian...it's even tougher to deal with media. Because when you go against the crowd like I do...people look down on you. Girls who don't wear makeup aren't pretty. Girls who don't wear provocitive clothing aren't attractive. People who don't cuss or listen to F this and I like me a He aren't hip. Even...if you're not a size 2, you're fat and not good enough. SO I feel this poem. 100% !!! Wonderful job. clap clap clap -
Freakin sweet poem. I thought I was the only person left in the world who felt like this. Well said, and inspiring. Keep up the good work i'm off to press the applaud button.
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a good poem thoguh the presentation needs some work, perhaps breaking up some of those longer lines? spill poetic ink and twist me, turn me into the wild lemony crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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"I am woman hear me snore" Hahaha yes! I love it. It's great to see someone pointing out for all to see how fake these people are. Not just that they're fake but horrific role models. Great job
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I'm not sure how I feel about this. I'm a recovering bulimic so the beginning kind of pissed me off, but I guess the rest was pretty good. moreso after I read the authors comment. -
Awesome !!!!
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Exceptional
Wow , very moving expression of "be yourself" portrayed in your writeing here, Applaud is incoming. Great style and form here and you do so well at bringing up a much forgot about point in life. So many people are fakes, and media promotes that even more. Well done! enjoyed it completely, keep up the good writing, thanks for the chance to read it. -
Excellent!! Brava!!
Bravo!! Well said point blank!! Being direct is a quality that we all need and there are times when we can fuel our passion and climb the soap box and you have achieved this magnificently... love the... "I am woman... here me snore" You go tiger!!!
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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It's very raw in emotion. It still seems a little unfinished, but the message is definitely a good one. I feel your energy and I agree with what you are getting across in this piece. Wonderful!
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what a fantastic rant. this is obviously something that you feel strongly about. Youre right you know we are all bombared every day to be the same as everyone else which thankfully we cant be. remember the stepford wives
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This is a little unpolished, maybe, but the emotion is pure, and the message is exemplary. Good job!!
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Awesome write!!!! I totally agree with this!!! The way the media always tries to tell us how we should look, think, feel..etc always upsets me. I even wrote a paper about it for one of my classes a while ago. Excellent job!!!
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excellent!
YES! YES! YES! I am having an intellectual orgasm! You hit the nail right on the freakin head! I am totally feeling this poem! I HATE what our society has become, all pin-up girls like I Speared Britney and Jessica Simpleton and so on and so forth..... time for some REAL women with REAL bodies and REAL minds, like us poets here! I LOVE THIS POEM, it should be PUBLISHED! -
ohhh i no wat this feels like, stupid society! i wrote something sorta like this, yea anywayz, good luck
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alot of people could benfit from this poem. I also try to read society poems, because I love to hear about the world from peoples prospective and think one of the best ways to describe it is through poetry. This was one that defiantly caught my eye. Very real.
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i loved it, it's so true to how everything is trying to control the population and create clones in us all. the rant was perfect, standing up for what the inner you wants.
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Nice
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You are awesome...you were right, I do love this one. YOu have such a way of taking something MOST women think, and putting it on paper. Better than I ever could have done. Its so true, the eating disorders, the crap women do, just for attention. Its sick and I am so glad someone else sees it too. THank you so much. .. you brighten my day!! HEHE Keep it up hon.
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YES! fuck the media propoganda!
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Beautiful! I enjoyed the rant, because you ARE so spot on.
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It's refreshing to find someone not drawn in by the mind-numbing dribble spewed from the boob tube. It seems that nowadays everyone wants you to join their group "to become like them" I think we need a few more independent thinkers in this rat race we call life. Very nicely written as a way to say F. U. to the Paris Hilton wanna-bes -
The Virginia Slim crowd has come full circle and carry a bit more weight in this show. Great writing. Good points.
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Good work man. This poem speaks volumes about what alot of people feel. I'm with you, fuck the media!!!
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Wonderful commentary on how spoon fed we are by today's popular media - what to wear, what to eat, how to look, etc. I love your take on this and hope that readers get the message. Great job! ~ James
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keep on speaking your mind...I think that you speak for many. I like how you tie in various forms of commercailization. I also think that the "venom" worked here.
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Great poem Nice use of brackets here Nice pun on 'I am a woman hear me roar' as well
Great sociological write, keep writing because this was really strong Good conclusion
All the best
Pozo
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Well I'm glad I'm not the only one who is sick and tired of all the media-produced cloned bimbos. Hurray for real women with real thoughts and real ideas. The ideas here are something like a wake up call to society, but I wonder how many just hit snooze. Nice poem.
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artistic rant...i like, almost expected a large-font F-word slashing through the middle.
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This poem sends a strong message to women. Ignore the hype and be who you are-not what the media image of shallow women portrays. Our weight, hair, and fashion are NOT what define us. Our own self-worth is. Thanks for sending out a necessary message to ALL females!
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hmmmm...not sure that I get this one. It wasn't as poetic as your other poem. But once again, the form makes poetry so powerful.
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Way to GO!!!!!!!! I cheer you. we need more like you around
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Wow, this is very true, nice flow to this piece, great job
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Wait, is this peice based on real life or not? cause yeah. i like my poems based in relaity. I know that this could happen, but i like things that i know did happen. But besides that little worry this is a terrific peice that i enjoyed from begginging to end. You just blatently tell the person how it is, speaking nothing put the truth, for those are the words that cut the deepest. great write
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This poem really gets to me, in a good way though. It's really great. I haven't read very many poems like this, hardly any at all, and I definitely believe that this is one of the best that I have seen. Great work, just like all your others!
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Oh yeah. I like the title, too. =)
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Okay
Do I sense the teensiest bit of derision for our culture's social standards? Heh, this was certainly like spitfire poison. Remind me to never get on your bad side!
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WOW! This poem is just pure...amazing! You have done a brilliant job with this poem! You're right, you've got it going for you. You know the difference! You should be the next president! You should be the media! You can change this world! Keep at it, you know what's good, what's real. You know reality. Excellent, brilliant, and perfect!
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WOW! Your message rings loud and true. Media is focusing on what sounds good and what looks good, that they ignore truth and what really matters.
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After reading a few of your poems, I've come to expect nothing but good work from you. This is an excellent piece, although part of me thinks there's a bit of angst in it, seemingly directed at society in general for their natural ability to force people to like what's popular. Hell, if we all liked what was popular, we'd all drive new cars every year, with one song playing while the windows were rolled down. A very good, if not unique poem.
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I completely agree with all of this and I love this write. Awesome job portraying our problems and showing how we should be. nice job and keep writing.
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Wow i do delive we are what we are, we become ourselfs and must be true to ourselfs, size and looks are no mirror to are soul.
I cant do with shallow people or their shallow views on others.
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It's quite true. We shouldn't have to make ourselves be someone we aren't just for the approval of others. I like your style. Keep it up, doll.
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Commented on this one before. Very true sentiments expressed here - good write.
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What a great, angry piece. I doubt there are very few women on here who don't feel this same way. I loved your alteration of that song title. Paris Hilton is all that's coming to mind. I think it's because I recently read a poem on here insulting poor Paris. But this poem definitely fits her, as well as others. Anyway, I enjoyed this.
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I really enjoyed this poem. Sometimes I feel that way too. You are who you are and thats it.
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Everyone is a unique individual and all are very beautiful. No one should act or dress or look a certain way to satisfy the media's perfect image. Well done.
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wow--i almost quit reading after the first line--i just ate--but i kept reading and am so glad that i did. you did a great job in getting this message across. thank you for sharing your talent with me today. viyanna langager
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beautifully written and with good messages..and good relative communication from writer to reader. nice job
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Way to go - how true this is. Young girls think they need to be so thin and wear asll that makeup to be beautiful. Little do they know that being an individual, themselves, just the way they are, is the best gift they have to offer anyone. So sad how the media hypes it all up these days. Liked this write.
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great, write and great message...but the poem seems to be more of a beautiful form of prose then of poetry...but the easy conversational flow really works well with your message of uniquness and speaking your own mind...i'm just that kind of person that likes traditional structure of poetry but the dashes and parenthesis is a very nontraditional style of poetry that really separates your ideas and keeps them straight and to the point...this is one of the few nontraditional poems that i really enjoyed, thanks for sharing! and keep up the good work and great messages...it can relate on a very universal level and that's what poetry should do...
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Roooaaarrr!! Go git em girl! LOL I love this and I have to say, I agree. Pardon me that I refuse to "fit" in and that I prefer to think for myself and do what I WANT to do as opposed to what the media feels is the societal norm. Is it any wonder why I no longer watch TV? Nope! Well done and wonderfuly expressed!
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excelent
Buy your moronic music with your pointless lyrics for WHO?
Vey well put
i totally agree
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Awesome work here, and horay for you for expressing your feelings as an individual. I myself believe very highly in individualism and hate it when others try to conform you to how they think you should be, or even when you conform yourself to how they are. Everyone is there own person and noone should be ashamed of who they are.
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Hi my friend, liked the anger in this write, yes they try to mold us, soon many will look like parade of Barby dolls,lol, nice rant , loved it,all the best, a big hug Di
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OMG, I can't believe that I read this RIGHT after I just posted my poem "Crystal Clear Pressure" in the featured column. Our views parellel so much in these two peices. I would really love to see what you think of it if you get a chance to check it out. I love the stance of speaking directly to the media in your piece. It's really time that people take stands to follow their own personal trends and fight condintioning. I applaud your work.
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Interesting
Wow-poems on media seem to be popular. There's a lot of truth in what you wrote. We shouldn't try to be someone else, but what can often be tricky is finding out who we are apart from them.
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Speak your mind - not someone elses
-Truer words were never spoken. Thanks for the compliments on my poems. If you like "Speaking In Tongues" so much, you should check out the work of Taylor Mlai.
Go to www.taylormali.com
Take care,
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That's great, and so true. "Do you remember a distant time when people were real" (love that line) no, I don't remember, but I've often imagined one.
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nothing speaks louder than a voice that has found it's reason
and nothing is more powerful than a woman that comes into
her own season...never follow the herd...always stray on your
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Wonderful message and I completely agree. I couldn't have written it better myself
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Good piece, angry, pointed, and well-written. I particularly like the first two lines, but the last few words didn't have the impact that this poem should have had. Overall, however, a good piece.
LLLSHJ,
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Powerfully put, without makeup, makeover, "mother Mary may I". To know and love who you are, as you are, is a blessed freedom.
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I really liked your poam, I liked the begining when you were ryming the words and I like the bottom when it said," for I am real I am who I am who are you" really liked your poam hope I can read more.
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Nice job scotlass! I am woman hear me snore...absolutely insipiring.... and you know what? Be true to yourself, regardless of Media, Milan and Martha Stewart. Who gave them the power of say-so anyway? I didnt, so i dont have to listen to them... Bekah
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Nice job scotlass! I am woman hear me snore...absolutely insipiring.... and you know what? Be true to yourself, regardless of Media, Milan and Martha Stewart. Who gave them to have the power of say-so anyway? I didnt, so i dont have to listen to them... Bekah
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