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You

I remember my first sight,
Breathtaking.
It was all You.
Butterflies creeping up my torn soul,
A rush of warm blood to the head of pure destruction,
It was all You.
The touch of a pure angel,
Soft, yet firm, amazing,
It was all You.
Smelling you took me to heaven,
Feelings undescribable,
It was all You.
Your name, makes me weak,
Your kiss melts my cold heart,
Your touch ignites my passion,
It was all You.

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Written February 2nd, 2006

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  • Asylaarix
    December 6, 2006

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    Don't you just love that feeling? God the feeling of passion, lust, love ... love at first sight ... it's amazing ... you really did a wonderful job here ... your words are so powerful and very remembering ... it brings me back to the day i met my future husband ... god, no one else around mattered ... my eyes were kept on him the whole time ... and I didn't want to talk to anyone but him ... it's amazing ... the feelings that you develope for someone so fast ... good job babe

    Smile, It Confuzez People
    <3 Sparkeh

  • Hanger
    February 8, 2006
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    Love it

    Now that is something! The emotion is pure and I think almost everyone has felt this at sometime. Great job


  • WhiskeyWhispers
    February 2, 2006
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    The emotion is really THERE in this poem, and I have to say that I loved it. Great work...! It's really...just....wow. I'm left speachless. I know exactly what you're getting at here, and I think you did a wonderful job explaining and expressing yourself.

    ~ Her Darkest Hell.


  • pale-goldylocks
    February 2, 2006
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    good job with that poem loved it!!

  • SimpleSynchronicity
    February 2, 2006
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    wow I liked this alot. It really touched me because I know wxactly how you felt when you wrote this. You really get across the passion that is love. Good poem

    *~*Simple*~*


  • lady Rose
    February 2, 2006
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    very good

    A very lovely piece.
    I enjoyed reading this very much it is tender adn loving!
    I look forward to reading more of your work!
    very very nicely written!


  • Scotlass
    February 2, 2006
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    Ah, the passion... Your words make me remember the butterflies inside when love is new (I still feel that way about my hubby and it's been 13 years!)... What lovely words. A very pleasant write and I'd like to thank you for sharing it with us.

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