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My pain for YOU

Your Message sends a chill up and down my
spine thats all I need to make you mine

I thought you loved me, Don't you see that I should of been
the one I just wish I could be done

I'm forced to say that I made a mistake,
but I found out you were just a fake

Our RELATIONSHIP was based on lust
without the TRUST

I knew deep down you would lie to me
but I was just to dumb to see

"Why I love someone who doesn't love me"

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Written February 1st, 2006

A contest entry

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  • PrincessofHalloween
    November 5, 2008

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    Great poem! I can completely relate to this because I went thru it. So I can offically say it maybe hard to get thru now but it will get better in time.

  • Darkbabe
    March 2, 2006
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    This is so cool. I like this poem. Because im in the same place right now. I love someone that i dont think loves me back. So yea its hard and i know how you feel. but anyways good job.
    Peace %
    Brittney


  • smokebaby
    February 20, 2006
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    Definitely something people can relate to. Powerful words. Thumbs up!

  • JaysonBaby
    February 15, 2006
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    good

    love it and hope that you will read the more of my that i just put in hear today. well have a good day hope to see you later

    Love,

    Lindsey Marie


  • LifeEndsNow
    February 13, 2006
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    this is really sad and speaks wonders to all that have hurt like this before im here for you if you ever need to talk
    -Kevin


  • getsbetter
    February 12, 2006
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    Hello my AP daughter, I see your still very hurt. I'm sorry lil darlin, you did good rhymne on this poem and don't ever be sorry. Great job Honey, good luck in the contest. GETS (pops)


  • Cheese Cake Baby
    February 9, 2006
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    nice job, great write and thanks for commenting on my poem urs truly ki


  • BrandonHerron270
    February 8, 2006
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    I don't like him. I do like the poem though. Great job. I really liked the lust/ trust rhyme. Keep up the great work.

  • JaysonBaby
    February 6, 2006
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    excellent

    I really do like that it is really good i wish that i was that good


  • ChaingangAngel
    February 2, 2006
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    I dunno sorry for entering

  • bloodied soul
    February 1, 2006
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    i don't mean to be rude... but what option was this?
    love, Tara


  • aRdNeK
    February 1, 2006
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    I know these feelings very well. You did a wonderful job of putting your feelings into words. Very powerful, emotional, and descriptive write once again and it flows together well and tells an outstanding story. And I like the way it rhymes, too. Great job! Keep up the amazing work!

  • je te deteste
    February 1, 2006
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    good

    i loved this work it is well wrote and it has a good meaning and people can relate to it

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