The sun, how it is too bright
For another day without you
Means another lonely night
I sigh
A single tear, all that I have left
I sigh
The moon, so beautiful and pure
An empty void inside my heart
As hollow as a hopeless cure
A laugh
The only way left to keep my sanity
A laugh
The star, oh how they shine
To guide my soul through the sky
For I'm lost without you being mine
A sigh
This feeling has gotten so old now
I laugh
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Written February 1st, 2006
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i feel this way everyday! i know how you feel! this is awesome! keep up the awesome work!
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Incredible
Another wacky rhyme, sorry i should me more somber, this has the most amazing imagery, u have used the adjectives really well without overdoing it at all, i like your use of repitition because it emphasises the important words without droning on at all, another success, keep on writing! -
Very beautiful poem!!!!!!!!! Heartbreak and loneliness can do so much to a person... You said a lot with this simple poem!!! WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This is so beautiful hun. I remember having this feeling before. you should write more like this it's such great imagry and such emotions. I love it.
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that was really good!! I like how you clearly stated your emotions in this! -
this is really beautifull, amazing imigary just made my whole body shiver.love it! are you still wanting a mother?xxx
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