I was
a reckless one;
soul and heart of
ice and stone, built
on so strong I would
never fail.Unbreakable,
until the dynamite
of your lips
blew the
hold to
hea
ven.
I came
to
realize .
love is
not all
about pain
and tears un
shed were spilled.
Not tears of sorrow
nor tears of pain
but tears of joy
and peace. All
these tiny
pieces,
when
put
tog
ether
and
welded
by
love,
like
petals
off
a flower
form one soul
one whole, one rose.
Author notes
Ok, this is me being almost mushy...well nothing wrong with lovey things...it reads from left to right, when you get to the leaf, keep reading the lines left to right, not just down that way you read the whole line.
Written January 31st, 2006
A contest entry
- Valentine Shape Poetry by Vickie J.
350 points, ended February 3, 2006, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats ~
you deserved to win, bar none ~ nice incorporation of sorrow and joy that all of us face whilst in love, at one time or another.
overall -- impressive
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This is absolutely gorgious.......I love reading your creations. What a beautiful new difinition to the rose.......I was honored to have read this piece for I think it is just beautiful!!!!
Smiles angle your way >>> Sandy
San-d
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nicely done! it seems realy hard to write that without messing up th frasing. though, it was hard to understand at points, due to the shape, it was beautiful, and I'm quite impressed!
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that is such a cool form. you did a really good job on this mushy but awesome write. viyanna r langager
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What an a amzing image you have created from these words - a rose of a rose. Bet that took some time to get this way. Well done.
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This is absoltely amazing, a picture with words...double meaning...so unique...definately worth to be seen!! Great job Holly Ritz!!!
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Thanks a lot, I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
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Well done in the contest. An amazing piece of work like I said before
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Congrats E... told you this was awsome.
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Nicely done Holly I wouldn't have thought of
the rose congratulations on the silver. Sherry~ -
I am so impressed with this rose and rose bud-the words and shape are awesome. vj
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Being that I entered this contest...and I know how hard it is...this is phenomenal!! Wow!
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if this doesnt win something, i'll be surprised
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Thanks!!!!
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I do indeed think it is cool. It must have taken you ages. Im never sure about poems like this, becasue I always find that you loose some of the rythum, because of the way that you have to phrase it,or not! But very pleasing to the eye and some really nice combinations of words, over all a great poem and a brave attempt!Looks fabulous. Good Luck
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Great!!!
Wow this is pretty cool, um Pink Fairy thinks so too
The content is beautiful, and like lavender shadows said, it's great the way you ended it with the flowery bit.
Lovely piece of work, best of luck in the contest! -
I definitely don't think I would have been brave enough to attempt a flower... it looks really good (despite all the hassle it gave you).
I absolutely adore the line "the dynamite of your lips", that's so creative. And I really like how you ended the poem with a metaphor about a flower, that was really neat.
Very well done.
The flying
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