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Quit to Live.


 






Slowly..apprehension leans in
on the fragility of confidence
with an over powering influence..
dispelling the fragile veneer
that emulates self willpower..
trepidation hovers..unwillingness
struggles with common sense
wiping aside with a swiftness sure
and powerful..
need, overshadowed continues to
waiver..falter
resolution of determination returns
as sharply as a knife..cutting aside
reasons to weaken..
"own good" vibrates in the chambers
of sense and sensibilities..vowed
to succeed.




 

 


 

 

Author notes

This relates to my personal struggle to give up smoking.
Written January 31st, 2006

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  • cutiepie gold member
    February 2, 2006
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    Thank you

  • cutiepie gold member
    February 2, 2006
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    Thank you...yes I hope to kick the habit. I shall probably take up some other disgusting habit to take it's place, but who knows Many thanks for your comments, as always, they are appreciated


  • Fallen from Me
    February 2, 2006
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    Wow, this piece is extremely interesting! It kept my attention the entire time. this piece is almost spooky, but i def. enjoyed reading it. nice job with this


  • Scotlass
    February 2, 2006
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    The emotions were evident - the yearning for whatever it was you were "quitting" wasn't. I didn't get the knowledge of just WHAT you were quitting until I read your authors comment. I actually liked the way this was left unclear as it could pertain to anything that anyone would be giving up, leaving it universally relatable... I hope you are able to stay strong and stop smoking (she says with a cigarette in hand... sorry!). I liked this as I could feel the anxiety and struggle in your words, but your strength shone through. Well done and best of luck.


  • cutiepie gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    Thank you my friend for your encouragement..I intend winning this battle but I fear for my families sanity


  • Deke
    February 1, 2006
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    I could never understand why it is so hard for people to give up smoking. I used to smoke, but anytime that I really wanted to quit I would just put them down and not smoke anymore. I also would start again just because. I have now been quit the last time since the last day of 1987; I knew when I quit that time that it would be the last time I ever quit, because I made up my mind that I was going to quit and not start back again. I threw away about a half pack of cigarettes and haven't touched them since. I had a sister-in-law that couldn't quit even when she knew that they were killing her. She said many times that if she could quit as easy as I do she would never smoke another one. I really hope that you win your battle Lynne. I enjoyed your poem by the way.
    Deke


  • cutiepie gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    Thank you

  • Pari Ali
    February 1, 2006
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    hanks for the explanation I could understand he struggle but not the reason for it, I also applaud yur decision to give up smoking, I know it is hard but I have no doubt you will succeed.
    Standing here cheering on the sideline
    Go for it girl!

  • cutiepie gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    Often when reading another's poetry, the intentions are not always apparent..this leaves us free to draw our own conclusions and interpretations it is allowed Many thanks for your comments, they are appreciated

  • cutiepie gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    Many thanks for your encouragement. Yes I was a late starter but have now to give up for medical reasons..I will succeed but at what cost I ask myself My apologies for the "grammar" errors, never was my strong point


  • individuality gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    it is hard to give up yes, easy to start though. i have tried a few times but failed miserably. nicely expressive language used here. though the grammar could do with a little tweaking.

  • cutiepie gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    I rather liked your comment as regards not immediatly seeing the connection between "giving up smoking"...but you did see a struggle to give up something...Often when writing, we see clearly what we as individuals are trying to express, but to another it can read as rather a jig-saw puzzle, where interpretation is personal rather than general. Many thanks for your kindness, it was appreciated


  • TJCasser
    February 1, 2006
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    I don't know that i'd have gotten 'quitting smoking' from the piece, though I know that I certainly did get the sense of giving up *something*, and I suspect that's what you were trying to get across. (As counterpoint to anorexic fat guy's comment, mind you.) From having given up smoking now (cold turkey, four years ago).... I commend you for the effort, and wish you the best of luck and easiest time possible with it..


  • January 31, 2006
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    Im really bad at understanding poetry I have no idea how that had anything to do with smoking

  • cutiepie gold member
    January 31, 2006
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    Thank you for your support..yes, this is the hardest struggle I have ever had to face but I have been called "stubborn" on numerious occasions, so perhaps I can capitalize on this and make it work for me Many thanks

  • Ir.muse
    January 31, 2006
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    That's good dear friend to give up smoking. You know it just hurts the people's health and takes their money away.Hmmm..as far as I know it has no positive point.
    Good luck in your self-contest.Wish you luck in it.You can win.I'm sure.
    Shahrzad

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