A very special day was in the making
for Chester Bunny and his best girl
Valentine's Day was coming soon
he loved Penny Sue the red squirrel
His heart pounded when he saw her
stuttered never knowing what to say
beauty left him breathless in the glen
Penny Sue had stolen his heart away
He was going to the farmer's garden
thinking of something special to do
he was munching on a yummy carrot
when an idea came shining through
He wanted something sweet as her
but something she would enjoy too
he decided to go to the general store
chocolate covered peanuts would do
Valentine's Day arrived in the warren
Chester jumped out of bed with glee
he ran outside to surprise his girl
knowing right where she would be
He had a bag of carrots in his hand
he laid them out upon the ground
spelling out I love you carefully
Chester heard a giggling sound
There she was with a great big smile
with a bag of carrots in her hand too
she said I was going to do the same
using the carrots to write I love you
Author notes
HERE ARE MY OTHER CHESTER BUNNY POEMS.allpoetry.com/list/21048
Written January 31st, 2006
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How very cute and sweet this is, my friend!
Thank you for sharing and for the wonderful smiles you brought my way!
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this si a very cute poem. the one critique i would have is that you reavaluate yuour use of punctuation in your stanzas. one anglish teacher once tolds me to either to always use punctuation or use no punctuatuion in a peice.though this aplies to most of your stanza here is my suggestion for the first one,this is the original:
"A very special day was in the making
for Chester Bunny and his best girl
Valentine's Day was coming soon
he loved Penny Sue the red squirrel."
i think this could work better if punctuated differently:
A very special day was in the making,
for Chester Bunny and his best girl.
Valentine's Day was coming soon!
And he loved Penny Sue the red squirrel.
you had some really good rhymes in here though, like, the fourth stanza. the over all poem was really cute and adorable. good job. keep writing! -
Awwwwwwwwwwwww, this was adorable, I loved it, you did a really cute job on writing this piece
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awww very cute! i liked the picture too! very nice right before valentines day! hey check out my contest and enter your stuff!
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good.
Cute. Very...cute. i don't read stuff like this very often. -
This is a totally awesome poem and I LOVE it. It's just so sweet and innocent and cute and sweet and awesome. The twist at the end is just so cute. I really truly love this little story about love. Absolutely wonderful. I will definitely be reading the other Chester Bunny poems.
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