LOVE (A HARRY POTTER POEM)
‘I try to hide my feelings
I tell him, but he says
It isn’t right. He says,
He is too old for me.
But I don’t think so.
He is the perfect one for me!
I love and care about him with all my heart!
I worry about him and it affects me greatly
But I try to pretend there is nothing wrong
My love for him is so strong,
It changed my patronus!’
She writes down,
‘That day Dumbledore died,
I could not stop thinking about him.
We were all sitting in the Hospital Wing,
We were all weak and tired.
But still I looked at him,
I couldn’t bear it anymore
I let out how I feel in front of everyone
I told him I loved him!’
‘I have feelings for her!
I keep telling her, as well as myself,
This is not right,
I’m too old for her
Still she wants me
She doesn’t care
The truth is, I want her too
But I try to hide
This is not the time for love
I keep telling myself,
But my heart answers
If love is not now, then, when?
When you have lost your head?
When both of you are dead?!
That day Dumbledore died
She confessed in front of everyone
How she felt and what she wanted.
All these thoughts in my head
In tears of love falling from my eyes’
He sits alone thinking and wondering
Finally he says aloud:
“I love her and I want to be with her!”
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
© Copyrighted 2006
Author notes
Tonks and Lupin...
I hope i did good
Written January 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Harry Potter by Corinthians13-4.
430 points, ended June 9, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Tonks and Lupin... very good. Totally showed their thoughts deeper than the books. In the books we get this shallow, Tonks wants Lupin, but Lupin wants her to be safe and is older than her, so he tries not to go after her. This goes a lot deeper, and I like that!
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once again great poem nooni. its obvious its about tonks and lupin duhhh.
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hey thankyou for reading and commenting.. i'm glad you liked my poem.. I loved reading yours..
can you please check this one.. it is Harry Potter related and funny (it is called Hagrid's Tea Party)
allpoetry.com/Poem/1869025
Thankx agian, Nooni -
i used to read Harry Potter and I do like n e thing related to the subject thatnks a lot for critiqing my What's next i really apprecitated it, bye.
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Thankyou sooo much Laura for your comment on my Harry Potter poem.. I'm really glad you liked it.. Thankyou for reading and commenting.. sorry it took me long to reply
Nooni -
Nooni this is the poem I put up for your veiwing.
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wow im really not into hp but thanks for tellin me what happens lol thanks well good job of the poems
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ROFL, i cant believe i read this and i have yet to see movie number 3, 4, etc etc. ROFL. I am so far behind in my movies, not just the HP ones. I can't be spoiled anyway, i am so overly emotional that i can cry and recry when i watch the same movie over and over and over again. B'sides, my kids already told me Dumble dies. rofl.
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I click her to see if I could relate. I've seen two of the movies with my daughter she's the lover of potter, but I couldn't but my daughter will when she gets home and I also see in the comments you have two others? can I get the names of them? LOve your other works I 've read a few so I'm sure this is a job well done
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Lol well I will comment seeing as I selifhsly used your points
As an avid Harry Potter fan, I think you have done a fantastic job with this poem, and it is very good. Tonks and Lupin forever!!! Lol.
Well done, keep up the fab work!
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Hmm. I'm not sure about this, although I do love Tonks and Lupin as a couple. I don't really feel it does them justice. Please don't be offended, it's just that it seems it might do better in an essay form, rather than in long columns.
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I liked this a lot! I wasn't sure if it was Harry and Ginny or Tonks and Lupin. But, it was a fantastic poem! If you don't mind I would like to display this poem!
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lol many think (i think it is logical) That he had done an Unbreakable Vow with Snape to kill him, if need be or in order to save Harry..
Glad you liked my poem.. and thankyou for the applaud..
There were parts in which i liked and others which i didn't.. i liked the memories about Voldemort and The Lightning Struck tower part (not the Dumbledore dying part though)
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That is so cool. 6th book right. I didn't seem to enjoy the sixth book as much as the others. Tell you a secret...dumbledore isn't dead! I think it was all a fake!
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thankyou NightShade
glad you liked my poem, thankyou for reading and applauding. thankyou for the encouragement
Nooni -
yes tonks and lupin are so cute together! i love the two different pov in this! this is so cool! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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I like that you gave us Remus' view point as well as Tonks'. If Jo ever want to branch out the HP universe, I think she would do well to write about these two. Thank you for entering.
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thankyou soo much Soul Zero
glad you liked it..
your first Harry Potter poem here?? wow lol i got 3 and read a few others..
anyways thankyou for lovely comment
Nooni -
thankyou soo much Suseann.. sorry it took my long to reply but your comment didn't appear as a pop up or anything
thankyou sooo much... I'm glad you are ok with me spoiling everything till book 6
glad you enjoyed reading my poem too -
I'm afraid I must admit to not seeing but the first Harry Potter movie.However I'm sure from what I know of it and your talented past works I've seen. This has to be good. On it's own merit as a work it stands on it's own gift you gave it poetic life .~~~~Suseann
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thankyou soo much Restful Rain.. nah that rhyme wasn't really intended.. i changed it because it was going to be the repetition of the word "dead" in line 9 & 10...
thankyou for your suggestions.. that Writes part confused me while writing down my poem...
Thankyou soo much...
Nooni -
hmm?? I don't know why? I typed in comment but it came out like that? Must of been a computer glich on my end my bad ^_^
Anyways.
this is first harry porter poem I read on AP, and it was pretty good, I am not much into harry porter, but you turned the subject into unique and intresting poem. Nice job!
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Great
This was an awesome poem! I'm a huge HP freak!
Two things I would change.
First thing, stanza one line twelve "She writes down,"
it changes the stanza from first person point-of-veiw to third (I think) person point-of-veiw with this line. I don't like it because each stanza is of Tonks and Lupin! So I would change this so that Tonks is still talking about herself writing something down. Not someone else saying that about her.
Second thing, line ten rhymes with line nine. I don't think that this was an intentional rhyme, but it sounds off since this is a free verse poem. I would change the word 'strong' to something else, such as 'great', 'powerful', 'passionate', or 'intense'.
But this really was a great poem. I reccomend all Harry Potter lovers read this! It gives you a bit of insight into the chaotic, semi-secretive, invisable romance Lupin and Tonks have goin' on! I really was J.K would put more about their little fling it the books! -
Thankyou soo much TJ...
i put the warning for those who haven't read the book and those who like to watch the movies only
Thankyou for commenting and for the applause
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I think you did well. Thank you for sharing it with us. (And though I'd already known, thanks for the warning before reading it - that was nice and considerate.)
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Good
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OMG, I LOVE IT!!!!
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You know what, I would have cared about the spoiler if my friend wouldn't had already told me. Hated that. Oh well, the poem was good. As is anything that has to do with HP or LOTR.
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Woonderball!
Just like your other poem about harry potter, this is equally, AND better than the previous one. I loved this, and It's okay about the spoiler
Who can get mad at that if the poem is so great?! My point exactly. *nods*
Take Care,
x Patientgrace x
Jasmine
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