A good night for a walk
Street lights illuminating the path
Slight breeze blowing through my hair
Finding pleasure in the simple leisurely stroll
A man standing alone
Dark-haired, average height
Wearing a long black coat
Dark eyes staring into my soul
What does he want?
Who is this man?
Making gestures with his hands
Motioning for me to follow
Disappearing into the shadows
Time to decide what to do
Continuing down the street
Wondering about the man in the coat
Author notes
Eh, I wrote this poem in my Philosophy class today. One of the students in the class was wearing this long black coat which inspired this poem (although I probably will never tell him that). Pretty much the meaning of the poem is that in our life we have choices to make and we'll never know what we're missing out on. We'll always wonder what might have happened if we did the other thing... Hope that explains it. 
Written January 30th, 2006
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Interesting... hmm made me think :P
I had a totally different reaction when I read this.. I mean I know the point of it was that we have choices and we never know what we are missing, since you said so.. but when I first read it, I thought of the man as someone that needed your help. Wearing a black coat, as if in moarning, like he needed you, and motioned for you to follow and then you left me hanging! Ooo that p-ed me off a little, I wanted to know what you did at the end, if you followed him or not!! Gr, just like a 17 year old.
Anyways, great write, I like to call these the thinking poems, makes you wonder...
*God Bless*
Sarah -
WONDERFUL POEM
This was a wonderful poem Tim. You are so right about missed oportunities. Thank you for sharing this very original poem. A pleasure to read today. Take care, Sandy, Mom.
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To me..I felt the man was blocking your path from something. The reason why he was standing there, was that blockage. If you get what I mean. I pictured someone standing in front of you, telling you what to do..why you should do it, kind of like your archangel/rival. Or actually..before I read the inspirational bit, I thought it was what how you saw yourself in a negative light.
Great wording choice and I don't exactly know what else to think, but it did make me think. Question. Of course, it's kind of maddening that a man's clothing choice could create such a negative atmospheric poem.
Now rereading the poem, the last line of the second to last stanza and the last stanza make me think that he actually helped you in someway. He helped you realize what you needed to do, and you are still comtemplating why he did it..who he was etc. etc.
By the way..with the applause thing. I only said that because you seemed to applaud everyone of my work, and it didn't feel as if you truly loved it. As if all it needed was an applause, the only think you could think of doing was applauding it. Same with my comment. That's what I meant by it..I'm sorry I offended you. Truly am. I just dislike when people applaud something if they don't actually feel the need to, if they are just doing it because 1. it's a poem 2. it will boost someone's ego 3. it's a friend.
Well....I'll talk with you tonight, or just later.
Kasey -
as always i love ur inspiration man!
rather a scary situation...and thkfully u didnt follow the guy
but yea... it does make one think... very good write!
mushy -
Well, the guy didn't really do any of that... his black coat just inspired this poem of me... Thanks for your comment, though!
--Tim -
wow this is really dark and scary sounding lol! was that guy like a stalker or something? lol! well good thought and I hope that this guy doesn't read this and like kill you or something! lol! but really its a good description and an everyday look at choises we face. well done.....I loved it!
~*Chelsea*~ -
Indeed, many different ways to interupt this, I guess. That's what I got out of it once I finished writing it But I'm glad you could see something different. Thanks for reading!
--Tim -
this poem kind of reflects that but it has a darker undertone to it and suggested to me that the man in the dark coat was taking you away to kill or bash you or something along those lines...but perhaps i am just dark!! great write though :-)
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