Sara-
The night you died
I was having a grand old time
With the happy wanderers
Happily wandering, with
Mudslides and guitar
Under a moonlit night
Smiling and singing,
Along with the crowd
A hundred miles away,
Same moonlit night
You watched the fireworks
And celebrated life
You walked towards home,
When he pulled up with a dare,
'Lets see how many people
we can fit on my hood'
Four of you got on.
Two jumped off.
He sped up a bit,
And you thought your last thought
Your head cracked the curb, Sara
Your brain died that moment
None of us knew, everyone thought...
You were too strong to die.
Back at the campground
My cell had no service
I didn't hear it ring,
Didn't know of your fall.
Until a teary message
Left on my voice mail
'Sara's in the hospital
intensive care unit...'
A week later, gone again
I called her on Saturday
And asked how you were.
'Didn't you hear? Sara is dead.'
Why not me?
Why was I away?
Had I been home, I know
I would have been there
I would have taken your spot on the roof,
Protected Will
And fallen myself.
Your passion and smiles
Would still be around,
My failure and despair
Never would have shown.
I'd be a sad story,
But you're a great loss
Happy Birthday, Sara
We'll never forget.
I love you
-Liz
Author notes
Sorry i realized the first time i posted this that some weird symbols showed up. Yeah I know it isn't great but it reminded me of Sara and how i felt when she died. her birthday is coming up too, so shes always on my mind.
Written January 30th, 2006
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Thanks for sharing this hard tragedy with us. I have never been in that position before, but your words sure evoked emotions that I would never want to experience fully as you have. I hope that this poem can bring a bit of closure to her death, but also keep her close to your heart! I hope to read more of your writing soon!
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thank you so much for your kind words. i miss her so much and i hope people will learn from her mistake, for it would be even worse if her death did not save at least one life.
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I share your tears with you, In loosing someone so close to you
Because I lost three angels all in one night, Though their spirits are still with me, And I can feel them always looking
Down on me, I know that they are still gone, And what you have written just leaves me begging To wish I could have had one more
Minute with them, Though sad your emotions run deeper than river
Or ocean god could create brilliant penning..And by the way I am sorry about this.. -
tha tis so sad im really sorry but its really nice poem
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this is so sad!! im so sorry this had to happen to you truly a great write!!! Good luck in my contest!!
alisha
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This is so sad! I'm sorry! I really, REALLY know how you feel! This is great! She would have been proud!
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Thank you for telling me about this poem. John was a lot to me, and I can tell you felt the same way for Sara. This is a great poem, but I must say that NOBODY, even the worst person ever, deserves to die. I know I felt like sometimes I could have been replaced with John, because "nobody would miss me", but you have to think positive, my friend. ♥ I hope you can feel better.
Always remember the hope. Even in the darknest tunnel, there's a little bit of candlelight found in it.
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yeah, she was a good friend, it happened a couple years ago though, so it still burns. a lot... but i will never forget her, and immediately after i felt it should have been me instead of her, and sometimes i still feel the same
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this poem made me cry. its very emothonal and i can feel how u must have felt to lose someone so close. im sorry that u lost someone so close. i am sure that i wouldnt have been strong enought to rite this or evern not just die along with her. im sorry for ur lost and i like ur poem... great rite keep it up
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Does good to remember by writing like this. Well done. Easy to read and understand. Written from the heart with deep emotion.
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a very sad poem that clearly expresses hurt and sorrow at the tragic death of your friend, Sara. Thank you for sharing.
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