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A Love Discovered

I always thought that love wasn't for me,
Having bad luck with it at every turn,
Never wanting that feeling to hit me at all,
But now I know how it really feels.

The way that this love has hit my heart,
Makes it melt with astonishing speed,
Not wanting to think about my loveless past,
Wanting this feeling to last for all eternity.

There is no trading for this kind of love,
One that spins our minds with constant thought,
On the person that we're meant to be with,
Until the day that we all are to pass on.

Now I realize that this love is real and true,
That it has the meaning I've been longing for,
To finally find that is truly amazing indeed,
Finding the everlasting peace it brings as well.

Just remember this fact I've found to be true,
It'll all work out to be the same as before,
The feeling that has yet been described in full,
To discover the love that you have never had.

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Written January 30th, 2006

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  • Beautiful Letdown20
    January 11, 2007

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    Hi Will,
    It's Hoffy. I know i've been away for awhile, but i just wanted to say hi and see how you are. I hope ur good, because im great. I'm out and about driving now and its kind of scary, but its fun. I probably wont sign back on seeing as semester exams are approaching, but i jst wanted to see how ur doing. Talk to you later.
    Love,
    Ho


  • trista gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    "The feeling that has yet been described in full,"
    I like this line, but wonder if I am getting the meaning you meant from it. I take it to mean love has never fully been described, which is something I highly agree with. It's why love poetry is and always will be a popular subject. Your poem moves from one thought to the next well, but is a little off rhythm in places. I would love to see this written as a rhyming, or near-rhyming poem, but I know a lot of people feel rhyme is dead in the water in poetry, so probably better off just left as is.
    Nice job here, and ty also for your comment on "Why". I look forward to seeing more of your work.
    ~J.


  • Bubble-Licious
    June 15, 2006
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    amazing

    Great poem! Love kills, hurts, diminishes, ruins, and at the same time builds life long friends, trust, and amazing people that we tend to over look. Love is very powerful and it just really has a lot to offer, if you are willing to make the sacrifices it would require.

    Thank you so much for your input on my poem, Please, Let Me Be! I am looking for someone who might just understand what I am going through, and I am tyring to make a few friends in the process. Thanks again!

    Much love, as always,
    Bubbles

  • noir eclairage
    March 6, 2006
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    This is something that I can identify with . . . I just haven't found that love yet. This is a good write, not your best though. However, congratulations on finding love! I'm happy for you! Keep on keepin on.
    ~noir ~

  • shereejay
    February 4, 2006
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    It didn't flow enough for me needs a little work but I love the fact that you are loving someone which is great, you have to (im) me when you get around to it, I'm very happy for you!!!!!!!Only because you are open for love, I feel you deserve an applauds

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