It has been nine years,
We have shared some tears.
We have paved a path
And enjoyed some laughs.
But that loving passion,
Has gone out just like 80's fashion.
The love we once had,
It seem like just another fad.
I let this happen? Why?
It makes me just want to cry.
I sit a home,
And even with you beside me, I am alone.
Nine years have flown,
And apart we have grown.
The bliss from our wedding day,
It is gone, The honeymoon is over, as they say.
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Written January 29th, 2006
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Terribly sad....well expressed though. I think this poem has nice flow and rhythym. I hope you can reignite the spark
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Emotionally its understood. Its a story told too often. Technically though the rhyme seems forced . The "8os" line is too long I think"just" could have been left out. That would help the flow of that stanza. The next stanza Home and alone sound good together but are not perfect rhymes. Maybe something like "when You are beside me Im still alone'The Cold inside cuts to the bone". IDK. The last stanza has similar problems. This is nothing personal.I dont even know you.And god knows I have been in that place. I think with a little tweaking this could be a real strong write.Peace.
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Ok that one made me sad. Two people growing apart always seems to get to me. Great poem.
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