You took me in
As your best friend
Told me our friendship
Wouldn't ever end
For so long
I bought that lie
Thought you'd be my friend
Till the day I died
I noticed a change
In your attitude
But I ignored it, convinced myself
It was just a bad mood
Till the day you stopped calling
But I didn't give up
Clinging to a dieing friendship
I hoped for better luck
Then came that awful day
That you said you hated me
Stepping on me like a doormat
So unlike you used to be
Author notes
this is the first poem ive written telling the whole story...if you want to know more, check out my other poems...
baby buttercup
I chose option 13
Written January 29th, 2006
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I liked this poem but for me it was a little cliche. But it's cliche to the extent that i can stand it. I enjoyed reading this because i could just relate to it perfectly. Good poem Thanks for entering :F
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ouch....
this was a well written piece. I can certainly realate and it really strikes a chord in someone's mind which helps to make your point clearer.
I especially enjoyed hte last bit of hte poem where you made the connection between you and a doormat. that was a nice use of a simile.
overall, this piece flowed very nicely and had a strong emotion behind the lines of text- truely heartfelt and I htink that you were writting from somewhere deep.
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this was a great write and i really enjoyed reading this..i can relate to what you are saying and feeling in this poem..your words were very strong and powerful..keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~ -
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Congrats on this awesome poem. so sad of a story of this sad friendship.Hope everything turned out okay. good luck in the contest. -
Aw, very sad. My Dad once told me that a man is lucky to find even one true friend in life let alone a few. I am a lil older now and have found that to be true. True friendship is deep enough to endure...if the friendship doesn't, then they weren't really a "friend". For me at least. Nice work here!
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Writing is one way of getting over the past and getting on with the future. A sad tale that you have penned here, but it appears you can now move ahead and change directions. Go for it.
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thats amazing, and similar to my poem kind of, thats ironic, lol.
~*Kris*~ -
awww sis - this is so sad! But a very good write. I like the different style. This is different than 99 percent of your's I've read. Very good peom, it flowed well and had great emotion.
i'm here for you
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