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Winter Spectral


 

Wintertime spectral~


 

lady of the snow filled scape~


 

keeping watch o'er sleeping wood.


 


Protect this arbor~


 

in its sodden slumbering~


 

till spring maidens watch of warmth.


 


~~Suseann~~

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attempted sedoka
Written January 28th, 2006

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  • Samplette gold member
    January 31, 2006
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    Another beautiful job. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 31, 2006
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    A VERY WONDERFUL POEM

    I truly enjoyed this! The picture is so fitting with your wonderful words.


  • suseann
    January 29, 2006
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    Thank you for your comments Presence. I can't take any credit in explaining a sedoka. I copied and pasted it from Shadowpoetry's explaination. But thanks.


  • Presence
    January 29, 2006
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    I am not familiar with this form, but it is very interesting to me the way that you have described it in your comment. This work, no matter the form is interesting and mysterious... seeking something more than the familiar to move the hands of fate. Like a soft whisper you call on... ?? to move on your behalf. Implied but not quite clear, oh, I love this work! I love the pic too.


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    January 29, 2006
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    that was a very lovely poem suseann
    i really liked it and enjoyed reading it very much
    very nice ending

    keep on writing and good luck in the contest

    Nooni


  • suseann
    January 29, 2006
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    Sedoka
    The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following
    syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives. And thanks Wanda,the odometer is crested and the old woman is tired. katauta - #3 ----------------------
    why do we want love? loneliness is bitter cold
    ... why do I want You? ...


    Edited on Jan 30, 11:46 because ''.


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 29, 2006
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    '...Protect this arbor~in its sodden slumbering~till spring maidens watch of warmth.' This is a lovely penning, suse...Congrats on your 400th poem posted, my Friend...well done...I've never tried this form...Could you explain it, perhaps??? What are the syllable counts??? Beautifully done...serene & elegant... Wander


    Edited on Jan 29 because ''.


  • Malabu
    January 28, 2006
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    dont know what a sedoka is...honey....but the words so sweetly melt to this page as they do to my mind...touching an essense of winters solice......these are true words poetic in nature and touching as a blanket of fresh fallen snow...love the message and thoughts so natural and asending.......poet....
    heres a clappie.......love it....

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