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Grande Dame, Aphrodite, Beauty's Art (Double Lento)

Missing image
by ~Gregg Rowe~

She swims amongst dolphins and flies with doves,
Trees of lime and apples amongst she strolls.
Be still my heart that’s fluttering with love--
Sea waves -- foam arisen -- upon she rolls.

Her tongue is snake sharp, her temper is quick --
Myrrh scents of her skin fragrance tease my nose.
Cur kin absent from her soul, I’m a Mick --
Ter River we sit reciting her prose.

War of god she loves as his bed she warms --
Storms her marriage with outside affairs.
Forms the battle starting the Trojan war,
Swarms psyche over beauty --  her darest flare --

And yet with all these faults she still remains,
Hand in hand into men’s fluttering hearts.
Plan to continue to walk in beauty my dame --
Grande dame, Aphrodite, beauty’s art!

Author notes

The lines are written in pentameter: 10 syllables, five feet per line.

Aphrodite's Bio (where these ideas came from):
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aphrodite

How To Write A Lento
by lencio-sunchild

A Lento is written in 2 quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines) with a fixed rhyme scheme. All the FIRST words of the verse should rhyme aaaa , bbbb with the first word of the verse and the END of second and the fourth lines should rhyme with a scheme abcb .

allpoetry.com/Column/1767753

When I saw the picture the first thing that came to my mind was an image of Aphrodite (Venus); goddess of love, fertility, and yet a duality of a woman where she caused wars and battles and came to personify heterosxuality and homosexuality. The photo drew these images up from my mind.

\ Contest: Title The Photograph
by cherche -d -ame \

allpoetry.com/Contest/1778018


Definitions of cur: noun: a cowardly and despicable person

Definitions of Mick: noun: (slur) a person of Irish descent

The Ter is a river in Catalonia (north eastern Spain) that begins in the mountains of the Pyrenees, passes through the city of Girona, and ends in the Mediterranean Sea at l'Estartit.

Superb carp fishing is to be had by walking 4km to the rivers mouth with daily bags well over 100lb *

This poem won a Gold award for its creativity at looking at a photograph. It was hosted by cherce-d'-ame (Reenie) and she asked us to look at the photograph and compose a poem. At that time I was learning a new form and thought I would give it a whirl and this is what was penned. Only after the contest did she inform us that the photograph was a younger self. It still applies to this contest because I feel the same way when looking at both photgraphs.


Written January 28th, 2006

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  • PrettyRagDoll
    November 25, 2006

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    I really really love this picture, so I am absolutely in love with what you wrote about it. My friend will be happy to hear this pic reminds you of Aphrodite! I loved your word choices and the structure. Thank you for doing research on Aphrodite for this write! It shows how much it means to you. Thank you for entering and thank you for sharing your write!
    -d0l


  • Frozentearz
    February 1, 2006
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    Congratulations on your award truly a deserving
    write,
    Thanks for sharing clapping
    FrozenTears
    Edited on Feb 01, 4:10 p.m. because ''.


  • Legend silver member
    February 1, 2006
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    Congratulation who could not fall for such a piece. I too am unfamiliar with this form of poetry But it is so beautifully done that I could read more.An excellent piece and well worthy of it Gold award


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 1, 2006
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    and she will smile as she reads this I really liked the form...can not critique that though as I am still very unfamiliar with this. However I am awed by the description and attributes that are given to this photograph. It never ceases to amaze me that if we look long enough (at anything) our mind does take over and we stretch far beyond of what the eye percieves at first glance (unfortunately we do that too seldom)and therefore form opinions strictly on what we have seen. You really outdid yourself. I do like the idea that you attributed *goddess-like" qualities to her, yet at the same time accepted flaws and human conditions, yet being able to be tolerant of those. Your opening stanza is almost faery-tale like , then proceeds to mythology , and carries on to a human quality. I think that maybe all of us are a part of all the above , one would really have to go back to the beginning of times and then accept that we are so much more than we dare to even think off. Thanks for entering this and best wishes in the contest,
    zzzzz
    reenie