fallen drops
in a cloudless sky
two crows
Author notes
Keep umbrellas open or wear a hat 
Written January 28th, 2006
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Amusing. I'm always wearing white.
Very condensed.
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Hahahahahahahahahahahaaaaaa... This is an excellent Haiku... this reminds me of an incidence while I was eating pizza on a beach, seagull dropped extra toppings, luckily it missed the pizza marginally... thanx for making me laugh…
mina
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Excellent review!
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lmao
this is hilarious I remember once when my sister got attacked by a gull 
man, those birds can really lose quite a lot
thank you for the giggle mommer
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Dripping is fine I believe. I understand what you mean. Your action takes place on the person's head, not in the sky above. The juxtaposition of the birds against the clean sky is just meant as a creative contrast, not as the current action. The "cloudless" sky does not refer to the dropping, but that the person feels that wet deipping. Soon he'll know it's no rain...and of course you want us to see that (hence the contrast I mentioned before.
I seem to read differently than other people?
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lol.......fallen drops of what?.......tff.....I love it.....they say when you lay on the beach......and a seagull shits on you.....it means good luck........but I think.....they are fulla.....shiet.....just like I had on my head......being embarrised by those laffen at me....
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anyway.......heres a clappie......love the memory brought back....lol...
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Thanks Jo
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I love this! and how very timely since I've been trying to "clean" up an older poem post of mine to which many had left comment about blue jays and cherry juice which they didn't "see" as pouring from their beaks!
really good write Mari, and you can't get any tighter and concise an image than this!
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Oops! That's one of the signs of spring around here.
I agree with Gen about the title, that is a good play on words.
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Haha! Yeah! Good one, Gaze! I think the title should be 'Dropping' though Well done!
~Gen
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LOL! Hey not everyone has been 'gifted' with some bird drops
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how funny. i like crows too. especially when they bombard people on the street. nothing like seeing a woman cry, benny,a bird just pooped on me.
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i like that the crows are the drops and its not what you would expect here i was thinking this was another cleshay about rain and tu da its not that is refreshing and made me smile. i love crows i took a tun of pictures of them when i was in alaska. but i cant say i have ever seen them as you depict here thank you for sharing. and good luck.
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I love the contrasting image of the crows. I seem to really feel them and see them in this piece. You've painted a nice vivid picture. Thanks for entering.
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Two lovers
walking hand in hand
bullseye!
That would be our fate I am afraid. I told you about my philosophical hunt in this poem, man sometimes I try way too hard. Very funny and creative, having the haiku explain the title. Do people often do that? I do it in fiction but I mean with haiku? If not, hopefully the collaborators will notice that.
Ok Miss Poopies I'm out of here!
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