alcoholism
individual disease~
families suffer
Author notes
Inebriation - Even though alcoholism is an individual disease, it causes splits in families, and everyone suffers because of it. A senryu dealing with human nature.
Written January 28th, 2006
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A contest entry
- How Witty Can You Be? by femurlee.
1000 points, ended May 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent! Perfect Senryu.
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You're on target, it can tear a family to shredds
good luck in the contestlol
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So True!
Very real. Alcoholics do cause more pain and sufferings to their respective families! -
"families suffer" that is soooooooo true alcoholism hurts everyone not just the person who has it! great job! I really liked this haiku!!! thank you sooo much for entering!! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Nice.
Aw. Nice poem. Short but very well written. Keep it up, thanks for entering my contest and good luck! -
Very short and hit you in the face grannygirl.....fact moreso....shame life with the bottle becomes a life battle....to all affected by this sickness.....no more no less...need be said....you said it all sweetie...
Hugs
Mal -
Couldn't have said it better myself
Excellent. I can safely say that this was a very well executed piece. It is a great thing when poets can convey themselves in as little as 5 words. This is a very nice piece and you should be ever-mindful of it's power. I'd be proud of this if I wrote it. And I hope you are proud of it too. Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.
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I can't really say anything Becca hasn't already said, so uh...you did a very good job with this. It's very blunt and to the point.
Good luck in the contest
Lisi -
very straight and to the point, very powerfull piece. I like how you were able to put accross such a powerfull message in just 3 lines. great job. thanx for entering, good luck.
Best wishes,
Becca -
so very true. for generation upon generation in some cases. good message deep and meaningful, we should endeavor to change it. good luck in the contest.
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I thought you tackled and emotionally complicated subject very well considering the length of the poem
It's a very sad state of affairs, and you've brought that emotion to the paper. Thanks for entering!
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