Modem sings a distorted melody
Fingers strike off-white keys at lightning pace
Screen flares up with feminist beauty ornately exposed
Southern villagers brew up turmoil in the land
Carnal volcano erupts, unleashing a burst of sexual desire
Alas, the mind is contaminated once more with toxic porn
Wife finds the key to the mysterious door,
unlocking the dark secrets of the husband’s mind
Shocked, appalled, dismayed;
Pedestal built on naïve notions
comes crash-landing to the ground
Husband now tiptoes on the edge of a marital volcano
Yet, has wife no desire to dive
into the ocean of indulgence?
Has wife’s tongue never lusted
for other juicy vegetables in the farmer’s garden?
Hasn’t wife ever empowered a southern uprising?
Yes, hypothetical questioning of one’s ethics,
still, enough reason for reappraisal
For if this hypothesis be true,
then “sacred” marital vows
are no more than a hypocritical charade
Author notes
For the sake of clarity, I'm not against marriage. I'm only saying that we should be honest and forthright with each other.
Written January 28th, 2006
A contest entry
- Titles by Nam.
400 points, ended February 2, 2006, 7 entries
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:D Awesome
This is a GREAT write! I could not agree with you more. You always did have a great way with words, and as I leave and come back to read this, I'm not dissapointed! Great job! I can't wait to go back and read more of yours. -Jenna xXx
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Thanks for your comment. I must clarify though that I don't think women are not entitled to lust. it's just that in the hypothetical situation where a husband is caught searching for porn, and the wife is shocked, I wonder if she has not looked at other men. I don't condone porn in any way and I do admit that just looking is different from actually surfing the net for naked ladies. Still there is some common ground in that both are a form of infidelity (at least to my view). My objective with this poem is to make the discussion a bit more honest than it now is; partners need to openly express their lusts and desires and set their boundaries, not keep all these urges hidden. Then maybe the men won't need to surf the net to feel 'manly'.
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interesting piece here..but let me say this
there are many repressed people in this world ..men just like women...
women are taught no matter what part of the globe you come from to be a lady , not to say , not to let on..even when married i believe many women still carry this notion well instilled in their psyche..sad thing this ..to live afraid of feeling anything..i embrace my womanly , feminine self as i should have always done..women have rights to feel desire and lust but society puts its leash about them stating if you express yourself then you are a slut or a whore ..i pray that when i do find my mate that he will not be intimidated by my need , love or desire..i have waited long to find love and i pray he will exactly what i need and want...well written piece though
jamila -
I don't understand the 's,' in the second line of the last stanza.
There's hypocrisy in many things, whether marriage or not. There's always the relationship before the marriage. That's where all the 'dirty little secrets' should come out before stepping up to get hitched.
This read a bit queer to me (queer = strange), it read as if a 'telling' and not a 'story' or poetically sound. I don't know, perhaps I drank too much coffee this morning. Just seemed a bit analytical, 'til the end, of course.
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