I’m wondering about my life
About everything I’ve done.
It seems like it’s all just a lie
I’m just like a man on the run
I lie awake at night
In the comfort of my bed
Thinking of the events of the day
What I did and what I said
All these confusing emotions
Overwhelming on the inside
I feel like I can’t hold back
To their wishes I must abide
I’ve been thinking about my life
And the choices I have made
Feeling like they are similar
To a Viking on a raid
I feel I’ve lost touch
With the reality I’ve known
My world’s spinning around
But my confusion won’t be shown
Wanting to get out of the circular track of life.
Author notes
Emotion: Confusion
Possibly a different emotion/feeling than most would expect for this contest, but ya.... For those who have never read my poetry, I hardly ever rhyme. Out of the 150 poems I've posted on this site, probably only 4 or 5 of them rhyme... and those that do really suck. 
There's a couple of similies in here (man on a run, Viking on a raid) that you'll have to think about... otherwise you really won't get what I'm trying to express. Also, for the last line... most of you probably know of the chiche metaphor of like life being like a path or whatever (one of Edgar Allan Poe's poems is about that). Well, pretty much my metaphor is that I'm on a circular path... I keep going in circles and such. I want to get back on the straight path. Hopefully all of that makes sense now.
Written January 28th, 2006
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I really appreciate it very much. I'm glad you can relate and that you liked it. Thanks again 
--Tim -
very deep and meaningfull, i have just moved to cornwall so my life is full of reflection at the moment.i miss alot about my life before but don't want to make recent mistakes again. this poem feels very relevant and i cant stop reading it.
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masterpeice!
Excellent! Well done and bravo! I love this and I had to read it several times! What a deep and powerful peice you have penned here my friend!
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck to you in the contest! This is fabulous!
Blessings
Frog
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Well I bearly ever rhyme and I choos not to,
I like to free verse, I find my words flow better from my
mind and I feel less forced,
I enjoyed this write of confusion and thought it to be a very good word choice for this contest, Confusion is a huge part of our lives and you have poemed it well, and I love how you ended it "Wanting to get out of the circular track of life"
Perfect ending for this write
Thanks for sharing,
FrozenTears -
Its on the top of your rhyming poems. The form was well done and followed smoothly. Remember though, the path that is straight and narrow is often times redundant. What im trying to say is that you may be supposed to be going around and around right now. If you focus on God and His word, all will work out.
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Life is confusion, confusion is life Don't we all feel like this sometimes... You say your emotions control you, but you won't let your confusion show. Do you mean that your emotions only control you at night, or that you can only take a step back and see how confusing things are at night as you're controlled by emotions by day? I tend to do that in quiet moments during the day. I'm generally too busy getting hijacked by my muse at night... She insists on giving me poems when I'm half-asleep, then I have to wake up enough to memorise them...
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wow i'm like the 10'th person our somthing to comment this peome .....that is by the way amazing work ...i get that strange feeling somtimes 2 when i feel like nothing around me is real and that my life somtimes dosn't have a purpuse our dosn't make sence our somthing ...yea its really wierd that was defently what to me was familiar in this poeme ...any way i really like it ...a lot its an awsome right can't wait to read more....
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I often feel lke this ona day to day bases, it feels like it just keeps getting harder adn harder in the teen years, but i think it also has to do with this medicne that i take, and how I like to keep things inside of me. This is pretty good, keep up the great work!
~Tiffany -
really awesome job on this, I kinda know how this is, seeing your life going around in circules, they say taht oyu learn from the past yet often I find myself wandering back into those ways that I know only bought pain and darkness, like a circulare path wandering around and around, no end, kinda like it is waiting to make you walk to death repeating the past till you can take no more...you simple just give up and die...this life on a circular path is a chaotic one, one of turmoil in yourself, with your family...I like how you say that you look back on the day's events, I do that so looking back at that I did and said, and at times I just cring, I see my faults and all the bad I did...but God forgives us...feeling all the emotions of the day, the anger, pain, sadness, happiness, love, everything, just feeling it again, and some are just so confusing with each emotion comes a memory, sometimes when you look back on the emotion and the memory you have to ask why you felt that way...retrospect always shows things are they really are, in the moments that things occur emotions tend to blind things...emotions...a curse and yet a blessing....anyway the poem is beautiful and to me it hits home, I love the rhymn and the flo to it, you say your other ones suck but this one is truely amazing! I love it! To me it hits home and really makes me think...simply beautiful! really great job and best of luck to you in the competion!
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Tim, in my honest opinion this is definitely your best! I really am into this, and I can see the thought and time that you must have put into this.
This is a piece that I think that we all can relate to at one time or another in our lives. It is that place where you don't exactly know just what is going on. Keep on hanging, bro', 'cus you will make it. You'll be in my prayers, ok?
There is one thing that I want to point out though in the interest of the contest. In the second to last line, grammatically, I think it should read "confusion" as opposed to "confusing." I am not totally sure, but I thought that that was something I should bring to your attention just in case.
Rock on dude. I hope you take the win for this!
-- Justin -
I've been here many times, many many times, but at this point, the only thing solid you can lean on is God, and the only thing left in the end is God. THis is an awesome poem,a nd life can be total confusion, but one thing is true against a million lies, Let the Holy spirit discern that part.
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Tim,
I really liked this poem. I just dont know what to say. you did an amazing awesome job keep it up.hugs amazing job! keep writing peace to ya.
~Beth
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Hey, wow I certainly understand that! It seems that life is always repeating and so do our choices and thoughts. Hey I think that is is your best rhyming one. Everytime you write it is different! Well, good luck with this contest!
~*Chelsea*~ -
Interesting
I like the poem. Night is when most of us do our thinking. Well, those of us who are thinkers. Which means we miss out on some sleep! But life tends to feel like a circle most of the time. I really hope you find your straight path and stick to it, Sharcu. I wish you the very best of life and love. Shancy. -
this is amazing! deffinitely one of ur better ones!
i no the feelin...its strange...and annoying, creeps up when u least expect...and may even coz depression...
good luck in the contest, u deserve the best
mushy -
WOW!!!!!!! Hrm I'm speachless!! LOL great job Tim!!!! Keep up the good work!! Four thumbs up!!!
~Candi~
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