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Getting Over Judy Garland's Torch Song

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

One day I saw my rainbow
In G-d’s sky
While working upon Paradise
I heard his lullaby


It is far, far away -- beyond the moon,
Beyond my salt tears; -- space beyond my brain --
Not a place I get to -- by train or plane:
Everyday He lullabies me His tune.

One day I saw my rainbow
In G-d’s sky
While working upon Paradise
I heard his lullaby


I thank my Angels and Muses -- so gay:
They tell of Heaven’s beautiful place --
I know He is guiding me with His Grace,
As I continue my journey today.

Like the Twister from The Wizard of Oz,
This disease came and tore my world apart --
My doctor refused to repair my heart:
--I find myself fighting another cause!

So my journey/story continues on --
This yellow brick road blinding with my grief;
In hopes one day my rainbow shines relief --
As I listen to Judy Garland’s song.

There’s days when my journey’s winding and long,
And where I have lost my way and insight,
I carry my heavy load, -- and His light --
And seen only by hearing His chante song:

One day I saw my rainbow
In G-d’s sky
While working upon Paradise
I heard his lullaby:

"One day you’ll see your rainbow
When you’re high
Dream, dream, dream if you dare –
Let your soul fly"


Journey with me Scarecrow and the Tin Man --
Let’s walk and greet our cowardly Lion,--
We’ll meet up with the daughter of Zion --
Joined compassionate friends, forming a clan.

Confront the Wizard to repair my brain --
Where I am so confuzzled and confused,
Some days I just don’t know what I should do --
Life for me is living under a strain.

Demand Him --  send courage -- to climb my hill --
To keep me moving through my world of grief,
My life stole by an anonymous thief --
Now my whole world seems to be standing still.

Fields of poppy flowers, I lay to sleep,
Scarecrow drags me down the yellow brick road --
Its these friends who carry my heavy load,
When I rest within my abyss so deep.

If I could click my ruby red shoes three --
Four times – and the Wizard of Oz is true,
"There’s no place like home", I recite in blues --
As pains jolt me back to reality.

If I could wake up from this nightmare dream --
Witness my childhood innocence once more ;
Experience every opened door --
To leave behind demonic thoughts of grief.

Since my life has not been a fairy tale --
Wishes are few and cannot come true,
My dear clan friends, I have come to love you --
’Member this when we gather near my dale.

Meantime, with G-d and you on my side:
Search a cure, to a curable dis-ease;
I will continue my journey -- find peace --
Finally see the endurance light:

One day I saw my rainbow
In G-d’s sky
While working upon Paradise
I heard his lullaby:

"One day you’ll see your rainbow
When you’re high
Dream, dream, dream if you dare –
Let your soul fly

One day you’ll finally see the light
And wake up to your reality
And see: --
Where nightmares flow in champagne tears
Confronting your childhood fears
That’s where you’ll be --

And then you’ll see your rainbow.
Where princes go --
To become kings within their souls,
Joining Nicholas Rowe.
Upon the poet’s throne --...
(Bridge...faded voices sing
Double rainbow Rowes
Is where you’ll go."

Yes my friends, (slow for the final...)
...somewhere over my rainbow --
is my place that I heard,
in His lullaby.

Author notes

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The bold/unintalized lines are written in pentameters:  10 syllalbes/five feet per line.  The italized words are sung to the tune of "Somwhere Over the Rainbow".  In the last two lines of the second last stanza, I have included the theme of a Ghazel, where the poet mentions his name (in my case, Rowe) in this line as a tribute.

This was a challenge, a white glove thrown into the ring by my good friend David (allpoetry.com/poets/D%20P%20Robertson) plus this intriguing contest that is run by Ted E Bare

I remember a certain message that was left on one of my poems my dear David  

D P Robertson 2 days ago said:

A gay guy doing Streisand? Fuck me, what a surprise. What is not a surprise is that it has been done so well. Quite frankly I take parody away from this completely and it simply leaves a platform by which a poet can exercise their skill.


Nightmares
by lordoftherings
allpoetry.com/Poem/1780862

Nightmares. Not a peaceful moment at all
Has my mind gone berserk
It is solitude's dark

Sadly, of course the short answer is yes. So do we celebrate the muse or mourn the tortured soul that creates this. The fact remains that it is so head and shoulders above all other entries, except perhaps one, that it deserves whatever accolade is placed upon it. The simple fact is that this should not be read as a rewriting but an extension of one's true creative talent. A "Foster's piss down the bushfire gorge" would not really sufficed here, it is much better than that- much better. well done my friend but if the next rewriting is Judy Garland I am going to have to scream


David



 Gregg

Rowe, Nicholas. 1674-1718. English writer whose works include drama, poetry, and an edition of Shakespeare. He was appointed poet laureate in 1715.


dictionary.reference.com/search?q=Rowe&r=66

Eva Cassidy:  “Over The Rainbow”
evacassidy.org/eva/otr.htm

Craig Russell
phantomdragon.com/THELEGEND/russell.htm

Written January 28th, 2006

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  • jenelda silver member
    January 30, 2006
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    YAY Gregg, Congratulations on winning a Bronze Trophy.

    Hugs Jen.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 29, 2006
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    Congratulations on winning bronze with this grest poem.


  • Always Deena
    January 29, 2006
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    OM goodness,Gregg,you have me in tears here. This is so beautiful and tell so well your journey. I wish I could think of something less cliche to say...but I can't think at all right now. This is beautiful,touching and so like you,PERFECT.

    All My Love,
    Deena


  • lordoftherings gold member
    January 29, 2006
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    David: Oh, "the little sparrow" as she is fondly referred to in Québec amongst the francophones and anglophones alike. To have seen this petite woman on stage rises a gaint of a voice, but the fact remains, she was still over a little of the five-foot marking on the height scale, but made up for the petite presence with a grande voice. Looking at my agenda to see when I would have time to pen one in Piaf's memory. gregg


  • dp robertson
    January 28, 2006
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    Well this is a interesting study in how muse works and how heart's break. If I can toss off a glib comment and it helps produce this, I will shower you with glib comments. This is such a wonderful piece and in everyway a work of art that is just touching and poignant. Without letting you off scott free there are a couple of rhymes I would look at at a later date to tighten it but that is minor, very minor to what is a very moving plea and a painful window into your soul. I loved it and while counting "Wizard Of Oz" among my favourite movies and Garland among my favourite artists and you among my favourite poets, strangely enough I start each day as straight as a cricket stump - without actually refering to my morning boner- just for an amazing change.

    David

    You really should see if this can't be performed- because it would work beautifully. Well done!

    PS Edith Piaf is very high on my list too!
    Edited on Jan 28, 10:21 p.m. because ''.


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    Completely Amazing! The talents are demonstrated here as you place this masterpiece before a captured audience. Definitely well done would be an understatement. I want to thank you for taking the time to write and enter my Rainbows contest. I appreciate it greatly. Good luck to you.


    Ted E.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    excellent writing

    You have done a wonderful job on this poem. I just love all the references to "The Wizard of Oz." Your words sing of hope and great spirit. Best of luck in the contest.

    etherealforu


  • Anthony-
    January 28, 2006
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    Well done. This truly is a true feat. I am in awe at your writing ability and the way in which you are able to reach a pinnacle and stay there. Such beauty. Well done. I wish I could continue and say much more as I can relate but I think that I will stop here. Tony.


  • rude pedestrian 07
    January 28, 2006
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    beautiful! but what was the reason for G-d? just curious.

  • Rowan gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    ^^ Love the comments!
    But I love the poem more.
    This deserves more than I can offer with repetitive praise, but this is a very admirable, thoughtful, talented write.
    I'm working with pentameters, and I want to scream in frustration sometimes!
    This is such a inspiring write, in form, and content.
    Bravo!


  • lordoftherings gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    ecrivain01:
    9 minutes ago
    Then it would be the blind leading the blind.

    I don't know what to tell you there.


    Then it would be the blind leading the blind.

    I am therefore forced to resort to the if you know the rules you have to follow the rules in my Galaxy to the Hitchhiker's Guide grammar and style handbook: stole is past and past present and stolen is past participle...which is a further past than a past present and past. Therefore I will keep stole since it was stolen sooner in my past than further in my past. Gregg ;f
    Edited on Jan 28, 6:44 p.m. because ''.

  • ecrivain01
    January 28, 2006
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    You could just start the line with "Life" and drop the my. That would make the meter come out right.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    Ecrivan: Come back and let's look at the line...if I use stolen, I screw up my pentameter line and I've been working on that one line for over forty minutes and am now blind as to how I can fix it. gregg
    Edited on Jan 28, 6:30 p.m. because ''.

  • ecrivain01
    January 28, 2006
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    I'd say you've done were well. You have a typo here:

    My life stole by an anonymous thief -- (My life stolen by an)

    otherwise, good job. Good luck in the contest.


  • January 28, 2006
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    Well done

    Beautiful....that's all I have to say. Very well written.


  • Silky Origami
    January 28, 2006
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    Oh, were off to see the wizard the wonderful wizard of oz...I love her.. She had the strongest voice at her time. They loved her deep intataion of songs. How loved and so innocent she llokked.. But she was a demanding broad to ..But she well earned everything given to her..Well, done poem. I really liked how you spoke about her,,Nice


  • Catressa gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    You know I never realised the true beauty of that song til I heard my 3yr old daughter Nevaeh singing it. Granted it was completely off key, but the love she sang it with showed. Beautiful write my friend..


  • Miss Splenda
    January 28, 2006
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    As a Judy Garland fan I say that I loooovvveeeeee this poem. Beautiful.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    January 28, 2006
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    Demand Him -- send courage -- to climb my hill --
    To keep me moving through my world of grief,
    My life stole by an anonymous thief --
    Now my whole world seems to be standing still.



    "One day you’ll see your rainbow
    When you’re high
    Dream, dream, dream if you dare –
    Let your soul fly"


    those are the best to parts here for me. an anonymous thief is a great way to explain so many things in life-didease, death, an un-caught burglar.

    the second stanza here is so full of hope--'let your soul fly free'--i like this so very much.

    beautifully well written. thank you for sharing your talent with me.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    I remember seeing the Wizard of Oz when I was a young girl, and so was Judy Garland. What an amazing film. You have written an amazing poem and have done the film justice. Hope you keep on writing for a long time.


  • The Burning Year
    January 28, 2006
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    this is incredibly wonderful..it was long..but the whole time it had me stuck in some magical kind of trance.brilliant write...I dont realy know what to tell you..this is just wonderful


  • angelica silver member
    January 28, 2006
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    Ohh Gregg, another wonderful poem, hmm and our good Friend David inspired you to write it! GOODONYA David I love Judy Garland and I love somewhere over the rainbow, we sing it at church, but not by Judy but by a very spiritual man who's called IZ he incorperates Louis Armstrongs Wonderful World" into it and we love it, we request it every week, we all know the whole song now, If I can find the version I'll try & send it to you. He's passed on now but he left a wonderful legacy behind. I love this so much my dear Brother.
    ♥ love from your
    Sister*

    Joan
    Edited on Jan 28, 5:25 p.m. because ''.


  • rebeka
    January 28, 2006
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    oh you sweet babe, this is so beautiful, i have tears in my eyes
    sending you all the positive energy and love,
    rebeka


  • Shh-Sues-Writing
    January 28, 2006
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    how rockin!! this is such a great inspirational contest, and look how you took off with that... it's such a pretty song, too... awesome awesome awesome!!!

  • Yechidah
    January 28, 2006
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    This is a wonderful poem, with a very strong analogy and comparison to "The Wizard Of Oz" that doesn't seem forced. Very strong, combining pain and hope in a wonderful piece. A little long, but there's nothing really wrong with any of the verses (perhaps a song version of this would work well, in fact). One thing though... the background (with the moving musical items) was VERY distractive, so I'd change that so you get more reads, especially since it's a long piece.

    You may also like some of my poems. They are predominantly spiritual, though they don't always have as direct a reference to God, etc.

    Be Well!

    LLLSHJ,
    Y.


  • January 28, 2006
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    Is Nicholas an ancestor? If so, he passed the talent down the lines!!!

    This was a great poem!! Thank you for sharing!!!

    ~Callie~

  • Aurora Ceres
    January 28, 2006
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    I am speechless, all I can say is thank you for sharing this beautiful, heart breaking write.


  • Scotlass
    January 28, 2006
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    A deeply meaningful and honest write to which I can only offer you my best wishes and hope that you find your rainbow...


  • lordoftherings gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    sseteoPulB 27 minutes ago
    .... 5890 critiques, 3 poems. Currently online. said:
    that is heart breaking. i don't have the words. so i'll just applaud. and wish you the best. God Bless.

    blu

    Glauriel 3 minutes ago
    5 critiques, 8 poems. Currently online. said:
    I'll pray for your healing as well....keep the faith!

  • EmptyWish
    January 28, 2006
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    I liked it. Wonderful!

    ~congratz~

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