Since there is no logic we understand
within the human heart, I see
it must be filled with creamy fillings
and showered with sparkly cosmic debris.
Inspiring yes, abstract, yes yes,
dancing on every two-for-Tuesday
eroding our perceptions of life thus
and making us wonderfully but woefully woozy.
Like odd arrays of crystals growing randomly
such love is strewn around and about
lively, abstract, dancing, creamy
as we try to pull the within without.
With blinding love comes blinding hate
the two go flying hand in hand
across the boundless chasms of life
that we hazard in the heart's spaceland.
Showery, abstract creamy dances
lively formations eroding time
debris from a cosmic Tuesday night
bringing to darkness love-spawned light.
Hate and love, both strong emotions
dancing among life's social debris
just shower us with creamy romance
that erodes the heartache of yesterday.
‘I love you’ means, "Please stay the same!"
‘I hate you’ means, "You’d better change!"
like abstract cosmic Tuesday’s debris
they're scattered among life’s memories.
Dancing, dancing creamy showers
of abstract Tuesday’s cosmic debris...
hiding in our tiny bubbles
trying to steal a kiss from eternity.
Author notes
That's a tiny cosmic bubble up there...
(Note: worked on since last feature...)
Written January 28th, 2006
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Thanks for the applause my dear uncle!!! Very much appriciated
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Well now this is definitely different and really really cute.
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thanks, SoulFull, and welcome to AP, where your heart will soon lose it's way!
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the hukman mind... will new phrases never cease to sprout around me?
thanks, granny! hukman mind... oooooo...
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This was an amazing trip! Perfect background to add even more emphasis to your thought provoking write. I love how you have taken us into the human mind and all the ins and outs there of. Fantastic rhyme....was a very smooth read! Great work!!
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An amazing background for this write - From the hukman mind to the stars and back again - a quick ride through the words you have penned. Very creative.
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thanks, Liz, glad you enjoyed my space debris! Just slaying some creativity here...
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thanks once again, Di... just creative energy here...
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thanks, Cristea, and a warm welcome to AP!
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Hi, what a voyage you took us on in this write, a voyage into the human mind and its complex workings, very enjoyable, loved it , good rhyme and good flow, a super poem, all the best, hugs Di
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Floating.
Brilliant!Cosmic and floating and oh so real.Your interpretations of emotions is very perceptive.Imagery is creamy and there is a space like beat which is very appealing.Flying,floating through space and time we find a place which is so divine.This is one of the most interesting poems have read for a long time.Superb dear friend.Elizabeth -
very good
Nice poem.I liked this poem.Good flow and deep emotions inside.I got nice imagery as "Showery, abstract creamy dances
lively formations eroding time
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thanks, suseann, a fine cosmic comment! Logic smashing hearts... yes, Spock was a lady killer, wasn't he!
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Oh but isn't creamy fillings and sparkly cosmic debris the spice of life! Wonderful write and who needs logic fouling up fuzzy high flying love anyway?~~~~Suseann I've always went for the non-logic in falling in love many times.Had my wittle heart smashed by pure logic too.Ha!
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thanks, Fi, you Verty! Nothing like a comment that somehow gets me to go back and tinker with something... so an applause...!
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This is awesome!!! Loved the description you put in this, it created amazing imagery! Also liked the whole love and hate coming hand in hand...so ture! I agree with Molly, all I have are good things to say about this! I love it!!!
~Fi~
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thanks bunches, Molly!
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outstanding
I love this, you have really written this fantastic. My my a wonderful piece you have penned, Every stanza rhymed beautifully and the whole verse was wonderful. I can't say anything but good things about this. I love it hon, just perfection at its best!!!
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