As spiteful words are callous and as heartless monarchs fall,
If love were shown in malice: you're the loveliest of all.
Author notes
I thought of it while sipping milk at lumch--hence the title--also, draws-up thoughts of a cheap love--milk sells for 40cents/carton and love should not be the same way...
Its a couplet--I originally had a long poem of 36 lines, but this pretty much says what I want it to say. A tip: When I'm grumpy, LEAVE ME ALONE, DAMMIT!
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Written January 27th, 2006
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I think nthe shortness really makes it...it seems a little less vague that way...
thanks for commenting! I g2g, but I'll read some of your work next time i'm on!
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great
i liked it! short and to the point ^_^ great job!
~Rock On~
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cool, I'm glad it got the point across--the long version was weak and repetative--I like shortening my work to the smallest it could be--I could even have done without the first line here, but I fear that that would be overdoing it, lol!
see ya, Katie! It was good hearing from a friend, finally!
-RnR
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I like it. Especially the moral. I also enjoyed it because you didt say too much in trying to get the message through like i am now
-Katie
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