The wonderful circle of life
From the beginning to the end
We learn from a very young age
On our parents we depend
As one new little life begins
Another sadly comes to close
How long will we all live for?
The answer is nobody knows!
Independence grows with age
New discoveries made every day
Every experience a brand new stage
Another chapter of a never-ending book
Marking the journey, where you have been
Valuable lessons in every step took
We then reach an age deemed as old
Waiting to go to our maker
Watching our history unfold
As children follow footsteps we have taken
Trying to blend into the background and guide
Watching generations new and old
With nothing but extreme parental pride
Slipping away your life is now at the end
Looking after the next generation
The lessons learned on that we can depend
And the cycle starts again…….
Author notes
just some randomn thoughts!
Written January 27th, 2006
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What did you think
Comments
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The rhyming IS a bit iffy in spots:
Another chapter of a never-ending book
Marking the journey, where you have been
Valuable lessons in every step took
Slipping away your life is now at the end
Looking after the next generation
The lessons learned on that we can depend
I am not a fan of twisted sentence structure or incorrect grammar in order to make a rhyme work. If you have to do that, then the rhyme doesn't work, in my opinion.
I do like the uplifting attitude this presents. This summer a 3 yr. old child I knew drowned and a 34 year old father of 4 died of leukemia. I need some uplifting. Thanks for entering. cq -
I guess it makes sense that life is about constantly 'recycling' - from a scientific viewpoint of course. I'm glad you wrote this optimistically - I really am tired of hearing everyone preach about making the same mistakes all the time. We can do without that negativity, can't we?
Good work. The rhyming wavers here and there. Overall a strong but not a particularly stand-out piece. Thanks for entering.
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Excellent
Profound and outstanding
The circle of life is grand
It provides for varied cultures and
Allows our species to expand
Write on Sister Softly
God Bless the Queen
And all your scene
I love your poems awfully
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