The sky darkens
The wind howls
Something bad is on the prowl
I sit and pray
Hoping that this wont be my last day
I look outside and see it coming
I wonder if I should try running
Time is running out
I need to decide
I run and hide
Hoping it will pass by
I sit and wait
The house is starting to shake
It lasts a few seconds
Then it passes
I see nothing now
I’m all alone in the darkness
Merely another victim
Author notes
This is my very first poem, i wrote it one night in a mad fit of writing.
Written July 23rd, 2003
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Mysterious, deep. I love the rhyme, and thats saying a lot for me, I normally hate rhymes. Very nice job. f this is what your mind can come up with, you should write more often. I'd love to see what else you have hidden inside of yourself.
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Hey bro,really like this poem.I def feel the same way a lot of times.Really good job
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yay! first poem! It's kinda dark in a not so dark way...hmm, that was confusing, no? Anyways, this was really good and...uhm...I like cheese!
Shade
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Good imagery
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Lovely..
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Not very dark, but it's a start. Let your emotions flow into it. Don't be afraid to hold back. I can tell you if you make a dark poem or not. Just message me.
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oh wow this is really good..keep up the good work!!! we are all victums in our oh sick and twisted ways though...hehe
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wow amazing.. it really is an incredible write.. with such words in a small context you brought out the meaning well.. i must congradulate you on a few lines.. Time is running out
I need to decide
I run and hide
Hoping it will pass by
I sit and wait
The house is starting to shake
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The ryhme is ok I must dissagree with Ready4dessert. but I must a little bit agree because your ryhming made sense but it didn't go with the poem entirely. You don't tell what happens and all this other stuff. What is it? What happens? I mean we can think . A broken heart, all this other stuff. It doesn't matter but still.....
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wow, the very first poem. this is magnificent. the rhyme scheme is a little off, but it adds depth to the poem. i like the way you use your imagery in more than one sense. as the storm could be effecting you on a personal level, like it was only after you, and at the same time i see the storm as this monster thats stalking you, from which you contemplated an attempted escape. ok, anyways, sorry for rambling, but i do like your poem. keep up the good work
your friend
emily
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