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I'm torn up inside

I'm torn up inside
what other damage
can you do?
you abuse me mentally
...but I still love you
you're wearing me down
I'm drinking again
these pills have never
tasted so sweet
my frustration
my lack of concentration
all caused by you
you are the arrow
clipping the artery
in my chest
If removed,
I'll die
If you stay,
I'll suffer...then die
What else is there
left to give
...to take?
You're singing to me
oh so sweetly
and killing me
oh so softly


Dedicated to:
Lance

Author notes

Don't comment and say "oh I know the feelings" "this has happened to me" no on can feel exactly as another has so shut up I don't care
Written January 27th, 2006

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  • HistoricJ
    January 30, 2006
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    Holy crappers, talk to me my lurver! This be the awesome shite! I really liked this, it was simple to the point and beautiful. It was crafted very well, and really screamed your emotions.

    Belle


  • Daeron-Obsidian
    January 30, 2006
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    awesome

    WOW SWJ! This is soooooo goooooodddddd! I really like this overall idea. Good job and I really like this one stanza:

    "You're singing to me
    oh so sweetly
    and killing me
    oh so softly"

    really good job!

    deathemperordaeron

  • Adam Parkes
    January 28, 2006
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    WOW

    WOW...*jaw drops*...this came form skywalker...wow...great poem

  • Flesh
    January 28, 2006
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    wow, I never thought something like this would come from you...but it was good...and I really don't know what else to say


  • bloodislikewine
    January 27, 2006
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    Wow. That really sucks. Boys are gay. I'm sorry you are all sad. You should take over the world and torture him until he grovels for forgiveness. Yup.
    I don't know. Sorry, though.
    Love,
    Natasha

  • StarWarsJunkee
    January 27, 2006
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    awww you be's so sweet! lol, I'm not sad anymore but I was torn up last night! I lurve you too!

  • sagacious demise
    January 27, 2006
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    Uhm....well I don't know how you feel so yea.....I'm sorry your sad tho. You know I lurve you!

  • StarWarsJunkee
    January 27, 2006
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    It's fine it just drives me crazy that people are like I know EXACTLY how you feel...No two ppl feel exactly the same way, no matter the situation. but it's fine thanks for the comment.


  • January 27, 2006
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    Moving

    Wow, wow! The arrow reference was amazing, really good mental image. I don't know the feeling and this hasn't happened to me, but I think you should get out of this relationship.

    Sorry if I annoyed you.

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