Luke warm water to thin my blood.
The sweet smell of vanilla burning in candles.
Capsuls divine, at least ten.
Sweet wine.
My sharp lover,
Slicing away each layer of pain,
With enduring slices.
The fruit of my labor........................
Everlasting Peace.
Sleep my quiet Princess...
Sleep.
Author notes
Written January 27th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark Poems by deathbysaddness.
300 points, ended July 29, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Suicidal Tendencies by Haunted Doll.
675 points, ended December 4, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - { depression/ suicide} by Angel Eyed Baby.
702 points, ended December 22, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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it was well written... i would have liked to keep reading...but well wrote... good luck.
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well that was creepy. had a very eerie feel to it. reminded me of cecilia from "virgin suicides." this gave me chills and a scary impression.
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Wow this was short but a very beautiful write, I loved the imagery to this piece, its so dark, and sad. you are a fantastic writer... Keep writing and I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Best of luck in this contest and keep writing
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thats really sad... but good.
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soft, sweet ???
with gentle calm you
embraced an end to dying ...
the night seems endless.
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Imliked this, so blunt and to the point, the ending was my favourite, good luck in the contest x
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this was a good poem short but excellent in my opinion
i normally dont read much dark poetry but this i like
good job!!
Amy
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4 Stars ****
DUH??!?? i never wanted to read a suicidal poem from you...but i guess you just made it for the contest
I like those line saying, "...slicing away the layers of pain...", this was more like a sad poem then anger one...but the sadness seems to be the consequence of your anger...
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend... just keep it up.... your humble little friend...
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.... .... - vic ( who else? )
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wow, this is a really great, and kind of sad, poem. i loved it, dark poetry is beautiful. great job and good luck in the contest.
jan -
excellent job, good luck.
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