You've caressed me in ways that couldn't
be conformed into desires -silently the contours
of this passion ensnares my captivity; for our
continuity to commence in-between that world
of unbreakable transgressions, all it took was
the simple gasps of mingled breaths to show
that long sated enjoyment
Thoughts of unfurled doubt escapes--
no, go to a place not yet conjoined to
what could be eternal bliss...however stilling
those waters of blanked movements(which solidarity
hasn't time for being dazed)
Hands, rough though gentle, encapsulate...
Momentarily our eyes meet for the union
to be an artwork for the sculptor to mold
the curvature lines in sinew details
I've become fully enthralled of this idleness
from which ways of non-discrete directions;
surrendering twice more to this dance, now a song
became silkiness of white linen
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Picture provided by Lyrical Soul
Hope this is an okay of a write
Written January 25th, 2006
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This is indeed sensuos, and also very well scribed. There is such a splendid flow of the essence of love, and adoration written in these lines. I agree with Deena; "this is the cream of the crop". A very subtle beauty this is. I love how it ended with that distinct feel of "white linen". I wish you all the best in this challenge.
Much Love,
Renee
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So glad to see you’ve entered this sultry and sensual poem as not many people went that way – so thank you! I like the subtle and elegant sensuality of this poem – yet, it is still very intoxicating, sultry and sexy. I liked the lines “simple gasps of mingled breaths” as well as “sinew details”. What I also like about the poem is its gentle fire and feelings of contentment that seems to rise from the white linen – the reference to “idleness” highlights that experience. It is an art to write good adult poetry and you’ve done it very well. This touch of sultry was most enjoyable indeed! Thank you very much for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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Okay? Okay?!
This was soft erotica, that left me looking inside myself for lost imagination! You always leave me inspired Rae.
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You are so great with your words. I love your word usage in all of your pieces. This piece especially paints such vivid images in the mind's eye. This was a really great write. - cgirl0410
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Deena,
LOL my erotica bone seems to be missing for months now and i had to really think w/o it
but nevertheless ty for the compliment and the same to you too
Rae -
OMG...ok of a write? You have to be kidding? This is the cream of the crop...the best any write could be. I am in awe of your greatness.
Good Luck in the contest.
Deena
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