The World is Spinning by wbiro at All poetry

Worlds are spinning

things are changing

stars are moving,

planets stray

people aren’t fixed

in space and orbit

so why don't people

ever change?

When friends come

it is day

when they leave

it is night

and unlike the earth

spinning slowly

someday I will break

the cycle-

maybe have a friend

who stays.

With each goodbye

a vast, cold emptiness...

then a new hello

like a newborn star

adrift in a gas cloud nebula.

Author notes

people come and go in our lives... and we are always here...
Written January 25th, 2006

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wbiro
January 28, 2006
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thanks, Viyanna, this poem had to do with AP here, actually, and how easy it is to come and go, without realizing how it affects others...!
Viyanna Rosemarie
January 28, 2006
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someday I will break the cycle
and maybe have a friend who stays.

wow--you did this so awesomely--the imagery is so very great. this astonished me as i read your words.

i too, keep hoping i will one day have a friend who stays.
wbiro
January 27, 2006
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Thanks, Bloomy One, I'm sure all who read your comment will need a box of tissues... (sniffle...)
Ishtar
January 27, 2006
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aww-ness
Uncle wbiro, this is an awesome poem. You are one of the greatest friends anyone can have, not to mention an awesome father figure. You know how to make us smile when we are sad and cry from laughing. It's all great...all sweeter than a plum from a canary's bum!
Know that whenever you need a smile yourself, I'm always here to make you laugh or to tease and be annoying and rather difficult at times. Thanks for all the help that you have offered to me. These simple words can't even illustrate how much I appreciate that you're are my friend and my AP uncle. 's

Your eternally blooming niece,
-Reni
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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Thanks, Mem, yes, the phrasing did need work, thanks bunches for the feedback...!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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Thanks, Cyb... yes, another serving of the profoundly obvious!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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Yes, Staci, friends come and go... and some are worth clinging to, some aren't!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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Thanks, D, for the comment, glad you got something out of the piece, friends come and go, don't they!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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thanks, ocerus, for the feedback, you pointed out something that did need more work!
prettiestinneon
January 26, 2006
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warms the icicles
of emptiness

this is a brilliant piece of work. i thought that it was so very true and the way that you wrote it was just so vivid and searing. it changes around quite simply from a more simple to advanced theme. all in all i liked it but i think you could work on sentencing (or phrasing) a little bit more..
good write
Cyber Artist
January 26, 2006
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You could have a sleepover? Ever the philosopher this displays a fundamental truth that there’s nothing more constant than change you have been sitting on the mountain meditating again it suites you well done and stop hogging the dooby
Staci
January 26, 2006
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boy how true this poems is. We take friendships for granted. We break hearts and sometimes without even looking back. And we don't always mean to do this. I lost a friend not too long ago, she decided that it was better to leave me be in my darkest hours instead of being there for me, and I chose to let the friendship go. I have moved passed it, but she took me for granted...
ocerus
January 26, 2006
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This is kind of a hard one. It starts out with a regular rhythm, then changes from verse to prose, then the stanzas lengthen for the second time . . . I dunno. It's really not bad, but it's a little hard to follow because of all the rhythmic changes.
DaDanoska
January 26, 2006
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Well conveyed and expressed!
I like this poem quite a bit. I have always felt like I drift in and out of people's lives.

"Some day I will break the cycle, and maybe have a friend who stays." People are always changing. The trick seems to be finding people who change at around the same pace as you.

I liked the planets and stars, which are constantly moving, and how that is also like our lives, in constant change. Yet unlike the stars and planets, we can control the rate of that change, and thus break the cycle.

I also feel that the last stanza, set off and alone, provides an excellent visual for the separation it describes. Reading those first lines, I feel lonely. Yet with the hello, hope again shows its face. Ever so slightly.
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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thanks Anna, it applies to all of us, especially here on AP where people come and go...
Anna Emkah
January 26, 2006
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This is really a beautiful poem Wayne. I wish you would write more of this serious poetry. This poem has a good flow and a nice (although a bit sad) message. I love this one. When it is autobiografical (which it probably isn't) I wish you all the best. I hope that one day that special friend of yours stays.
Anna.
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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thanks for the comment, and helpful words, heplesslylost!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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thanks again, my brightest angel!
wbiro
January 26, 2006
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thanks, sis, now back to my epic poem on a troubled 15yr old...
Lyrical Soul
January 25, 2006
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You know bro, life would be very depressing and very boring if things never changed However, I understand your sentiment. Having just recently been cutoff of a friendship because my sentence wasn't long enough (~rolling eyes) but what are ya gonna do ya know? Oh well...I don't know who left you or who left someone, but I'm sorry you're sad. I still love ya like a brother

~Lyrical
SexyAngel0418
January 25, 2006
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WOW... This is an awesome poem AP daddy!!! You did a great job and the background is soo beautiful!!! Keep up the great work!!!

Hugs,
Your brightest angel
imprisioned soul
January 25, 2006
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melted my heart.
this is so good. it made my heart melt wen i read it. its kinda sad. i no exactly wut u r feeling frm personal experience and it sux so i just wunna say good luck gettin thru it i no its tough but no matta wut u will make it.
wbiro
January 25, 2006
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thanks for the comment, Mrs., much appreciated, and welcome to AP!
mrslukebrown
January 25, 2006
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Even though it was shorter it had a very nice flow to it. I liked the "someday too, i'll get it right." the words just made my heart feel what your heart was feeling and thinking. take care <<33
wbiro
January 25, 2006
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thanks greatly for your feedback, tin...!
tinntinabulation
January 25, 2006
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I thought this was a very nice poem. There is so much emotion in your words.

You are right. People are always changing. That can make things a bit sad at times.