In summer after dark
When stars and moon shine bright
And there is not one cloud,
The peace I won't disturb,
For I am never loud.
In summer after dark
With everyone asleep,
A silent form sneaks out
To watch celestial orbs
In their nocturnal route.
In summer after dark
Where no one else can see,
I watch the fireflies.
Not another witness,
It's only for my eyes.
In summer after dark
When Moon has gone to rest,
The gloom is pierced by light.
I must go back inside,
Await another night.
Author notes
I think I may have had some problems with the meter of this form. If anyone notices anything, let me know. Thanks!! 
Written January 25th, 2006
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I enjoy reading this here poem from you..I didn't know you could be so vivid and have such and imagaination...I thought you only wrote about chicken and milk...j/k around...thanks for entering much love, Raneika
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You did well with this Monchielle. You have captured the form quite nicely. Thank you so much for entering our challenge with this creative work. The best of luck to you.
Much Love,
Renee
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This was a great Monchielle, Chicken-Milk! Only thing I reacted to was the capitalization of the first letter in each line, as if it was written in Word.
You could also add a little about the form in your Author's Comment, and it would be perfect. I love the rhymes, and the rythm was good, the flow was fine, and the imagery great! You have my applause, and I wish you best of luck in the contest! Jim
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