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whisper

 

 

 

into the pool of my ear a word drops slowly:
a shadow of sound, a single drop,
a ripple from the red conversation
of your lips

it falls and breaks and spreads its water -
soft of syllable and resonance it trickles
down my hair, and within me
my heart listens

time and again,

it is this passage of temperature, this sipping
of intimate breath, this undertone
of fluttering flags that susurrates
an upsurge of doves

from my breast

 

 

 




 

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Susurrate = whisper

Written January 25th, 2006

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  • milanka
    June 11, 2007
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    This peace is very nice, well done Nicolette.
    Milanka - Miki :-


  • Oisin silver member
    May 13, 2007

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    "my heart listens"

    You have found a true relevance to sound and to the greater awareness of an emotion. It is so wonderful to feel the words of a lover and not just hear words from a stranger of your heart.

    Very wonderful.


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Jim, thank you so much, my friend. To have you go through my poetry and to read your comments, is an honour indeed - thank you... ~

  • Son of Jim
    August 17, 2006
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    Nicole
    how the heart flutters from a glimpse, a touch, the smell, but also the sound of said lovers voice. This is such a beautiful metaphor for all of this. So very easy to picture all the images, ear pools, sound droplets. bravo.

  • Nicolette gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    Thank you very much! Glad you experienced that "aaaah"! ~


  • TheDrip
    June 11, 2006
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    So much said with so little, refreshing, to say the least. At first it had me a little confused but reading your comments helped quite a bit. Now that I understand, I say Bravo for your ease with narrating a picture, giving letters to feeling, and making the reader feel that "aahhh"ness. Thank you for entering and good luck!

  • Nicolette gold member
    June 3, 2006
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    Thanks, Jordan..! ~


  • Not-The-Sun silver member
    June 3, 2006
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    beautiful write, im completely stunned for words to describe. Fantastic write, keep it up!! GOod luck inthe contest *Jordan*

  • ShellG
    May 1, 2006
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    This is beautiful, thanks for entering,good luck.
    ShellG.

  • Nicolette gold member
    April 15, 2006
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    Thank you! I love using metaphors... - best wishes.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    April 14, 2006
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    This is a truly beautiful poem. Never heard of poetry quite being explained like this. But I really liked it. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.

  • Nicolette gold member
    March 25, 2006
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    Thank yo so much, Vlindertjie....Love you too, my friend


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 25, 2006
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    I soooooo love this poem, Nic...well deserving of the trophy, my Friend...Congratulations...Love you, Woman... Vlindertjie


  • sjgaither
    March 23, 2006
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    This is an amazing piece. Thank you for entering!

  • Nicolette gold member
    March 12, 2006
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    Thank you for the kind words - you are a sweet poetess! ~


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    March 12, 2006
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    This is absolutely beautiful. I loved the way your words flowed. I loved your descriptiveness. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!

  • Nicolette gold member
    March 2, 2006
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    Thank you!! Best wishes ~


  • ScarletLetter
    March 1, 2006
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    awsome job..so much detail!

    Very cool.


  • lizwicker
    March 1, 2006
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    It has such a deep beauty to it.. thank you for entering such a great write... good luck!

  • Nicolette gold member
    February 24, 2006
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    Thank you, LostMermaid for the kind comment and the applause - best wishes! ~


  • Decorus Somnium
    February 24, 2006
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    Very lovely piece of work!It shows your emotions...very deep and amazing poem!Love it!
    Keep writing
    Best Wishes and Best Luck in the contest
    ~LostMermaid~


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 17, 2006
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    Yvette, thank you for the very lovely comment - and also the one on my author's page. Many blessings to you ~

  • Nicolette gold member
    February 17, 2006
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    Thank you...!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 17, 2006
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    I found this poetry breathtaking,I would have to quote it in it`s entirety as I couldn`t choose my favourite line...love and light,Yvette

  • ecrivain01
    February 17, 2006
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    Your cheering section has covered everything. It's a good poem.

  • Nicolette gold member
    February 16, 2006
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    Thank you, Al....much appreciated! ~


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    February 16, 2006
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    Absolutely wonderful.....


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 13, 2006
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    Stu, thank you for the lovely comment and the wishes - much appreciated. Hope this stirs some "entanglements" in you!!


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    February 13, 2006
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    Hi Nicolette

    Another wonderfully subtle-yet-powerful and vivid piece of inspiration from the wonderful world that is you!!! Good luck with this one in the Contest. "Soft of syllable and resonance it trickles ..." ah, beautiful indeed! Syllabic subtlety, captured fantastically there!

    Best wishes and success for the Contest

    Stu

  • Nicolette gold member
    February 10, 2006
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    Thank you very much, Mackintoch! ~


  • Rele anmwe
    February 10, 2006
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    Wow, this is spectacular


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 2, 2006
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    Thanks, Anasuya - wow, I appreciate your wonderful comment...I know you're not one for love poetry, so your comment really made me smile, girl!! I kind of like this poem too

  • Nicole Hanna
    February 2, 2006
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    "red conversation of your lips" was enough to make me weep with jealousy. Even if the rest of the poem had sucked (and.. psh.. yeah, right!) this line would have been the redeeming factor. Of course, you're always brilliant, so it was really one fantastic line in one completely fantastic poem. The final image leaves me feeling love, and honestly, emotion is lacking quite frequently in pieces I read on AP. Definitely not this one. This one weeps with emotion. Makes me all sentimental and wishing I could write love poetry as inspiring as this.


  • Josy2
    February 2, 2006
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    I like this piece of work and the metaphorical language used.


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 30, 2006
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    Rob, thank you very much. You write the most indepth comments and you have the ability to pinpoint the essence, the content and the poetic qualities of a poem with such ease. Always wonderful to have you here on one of my pages! Best wishes to you ~


  • Lyndon gold member
    January 30, 2006
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    Excellence

    What a pleasing poem for the music of a lover's kiss. I have not looked at the host of comments above me but my favourite part is the beautiful aspiration, the sibilance of " ... undertone of / fluttyering flags that susurrates/an upsurge of doves
    But, the poem could and does not end there. I entirely agree with the separated final line posing as an afterthought but pregnant with meaning and feeling.
    You have used lineation and spacing very well. Your free verse here forms one of the more sensuously dignified poems of eroticism that I have read: the lover's kiss. Congratulations. Ron


  • AngelsDemise
    January 29, 2006
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    good job my friend....this is very good...........you have a great talent......keep the talent flowing through your veins and always share your gift....


    Meus Opus Magnus and Blessed Be...Alison-Maree

    P.S. Don't Be A Stranger Just Be STRANGE!!!


  • Dolphin Shaktiheart
    January 29, 2006
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    Delicious

    MMMMM * suckle suckle suckle suckle....*


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 28, 2006
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    Tamara, thank you, dear one - so good to hear from you again! How are you...? Much love to you

  • lanny
    January 28, 2006
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    nice job

    very poetic

  • Ebony
    January 27, 2006
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    stupendious

    the tender touches of whispers and especially fallen from which it may be so but from the doves of the breast
    oh my girly how you do weave you words so sweetly with the love of your endearing girly body pparts so swealing and lovely so......
    uuueeewww you arrrr sooo goood....
    did any one ever tell you U are a naugty girl but a good one at it tooo?!
    damn it is good toto t be back here on you page again!!!!

    big HUgs and sugar kisses to you
    I luv you tons and tons
    I and getting so giddy inside reading this I must excuse myself now. LOL
    I love you miss Nicolette Bookie

  • InBetweenThoughts
    January 26, 2006
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    Congratulations on your wonderful award as your poem was very stimulating, a great write, well done.....have a beautiful day, Ken IBT


  • jasminerose
    January 26, 2006
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    Congratulations

    Beautifully written and well deserved!!!! Congratulations!!!! Jasminerose


  • poet2angels gold member
    January 26, 2006
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    This is great. Awesome. Definitely in the dog house. -Randy


  • Annalise
    January 26, 2006
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    Well, what can I say? You know this is a good poem, I don't need to tell you that. It's also very clear to me that you have talent, and a good amount of it.

    (Simon) Meli


  • blood ridden thorn
    January 26, 2006
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    good

    I thought it was good, don't stop writing, I can tell many people enjoyed your poem.


  • Angel Eyes
    January 26, 2006
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    Oh, the many feelings and thoughts experienced from the whipering of sweet nothings....Love it!
    Your choice of words and structure is fantastic. Incredible verbage.
    I must say.
    I will most definitely be keeping an eye on your work.
    Keep up the amazing work!!
    It is truly flawless!!
    Take care!!

    ~Angel Eyes~

  • LadyofDreams
    January 25, 2006
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    abstract, yet the form was beautiful.

  • Twinkleeyes
    January 25, 2006
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    I love this poem. Flowing,...enchanting. It draws you in. Great job!


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Nick, thanks a lot for the lovely comment. Glad you enjoyed this poetic whisper and hush. Take care ~


  • NSYancey
    January 25, 2006
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    tantalizing

    This is beautiful. I love how natural it felt to read this. I'm growing to appreciate synesthesia, something I have little practice in, but am amazed every time I see it now. Thank you for a wonderful pique of interest. Quite a beautiful read. It hushed me.

    Have a good day, and take care.

    Nick Yancey


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Deena, thank you dear one for this wonderful comment. It is up to the 4 judges, but you have me smiling, my friend. I kind of like this too... Much love to you


  • Always Deena
    January 25, 2006
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    Let me bow at your feet,fine poet,Nicolette,I am insane here with envy for your talent and grace. This is amazing. It is an honor to call you friend. Good Luck in the contest...you should win hands down!

    Deena


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    It's 11:30 at night, Nic...prime time for this lil' Poet... & they aren't so much compliments as they are merely observations on the obvious, m'Lady...Many hugs across the horizon, m'Lady... Vlindertjie


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Sighs...thank you, Vlindertjie for all the love and the wonderful compliments, dear friend. Have a lovely day (or is it sweet dreams time for you now?). Much love to you, poetess

  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, Ruth for your very kind comment - you have me smiling, poetess! ~


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    '...time and again, it is this passage of temperature, this sipping of intimate breath, this undertone of fluttering flags that susurrates an upsurge of doves from my breast' Sighhh... Hmmm...sighhh... Ahhh, Hell, Nic...sighhh... Dammmnnn, Woman...you sing such sweet heartmusic, my Sister of the Soul...this is glorious, my Friend...Incredibly profound, romantic, elegant, eloquent, amazing...Good luck in the contest...everybody else... Love you, Woman... Vlindertjie


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you very much, helplesslylost. To read such a comment is a pleasure indeed! ~


  • RuthKephart
    January 25, 2006
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    I am quickly becoming a fan of your work Your imagery and language choice is exceptional. I love the smooth, graceful flow of your words and those quicksilver images you capture so eloquently and timelessly in your writing. Beautiful, beautiful write
    Ruth

  • Word--Warrior
    January 25, 2006
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    Unusual flow

    Unusual wording, yet it catches attention almost immediately!


  • imprisioned soul
    January 25, 2006
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    speechless

    wow that is amazing. it wuz ineteresting i havent read one that discriptive up here b4. it really puts a visual picture in ur head and wont let u let go of the feeling minutes after u have read it. i enjoyed being able to feel the meaning and feeling behind the words that are on the screen. i love everything about this poem it is also very well constructed but beautifully written with adjectives that only make u wunt to read more. it is amazing how so few words can be morphed into something with so much feeling. it is truly amazing and left me speechless..............good luck with whereva ur poetry takes u.

    ~helplessly lost~


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you grannyeri for your kind words and for supporting my poetry - much appreciated. ~


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Another precious pen write from you - I'm finding so many of them lately - written with such emotions. This is my kind of poem.


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, tanzanite - you are always so kind in your comments! South African 's to you!


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Diana, thank you for your kind compliments, dear one. Enjoy love's whispers! Have you seen my White Linen contest...? ~


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Paula, what a delight to see one of your wonderful comments again! Thank you, my friend...I've missed you around here...and thank you for the magic of your words too!


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    My dear Nicolette, I've been more than a little neglectful of your beautiful poetry, but when I finally come back around, I find this lovely piece! Your work has been muchly missed by me, and even now, as I sit and contemplate your soft and gentle words.....allow them to do their magic on my mind and heart.....they wend their way deep into my psyche. Your poetry has an uncanny ability to allow me to shed the cares of my day, and simply revel in the pure bliss of the word pictures you create, as well as the emotions it elicits from me. A trademark of your inspiring, and brilliant poetry! I know that, no matter the topic, I'm always in for a special delight when I breathe in your words! I always find a sense of peace and comfort. You lend credence to my own thoughts and feelings. Your poetry, my friend, is truly "magical!"
    Paula


  • leander Moderators member
    January 25, 2006
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    aaah, you have no idea how glad I actually am to see this poem here I haven't really done that much today, however I have been really busy... - with puking my guts out
    I had this party from work yesterday, you know: free food and booze so I ate a little bit of this, a little bit of that... all things with fish in in fact... but then I had about 5 beers after that before we went home. I wasn't drunk at all (I'm used to drink a whoooole lot more ) and I even got my colleague home (who was drunk ). but this morning, I felt really sick... now it seemed that the fish and beer weren't really the best combination (why didn't I know that ) and yes... that resulted in hanging over the toilet about 5 times an hour, from around 8 AM till 5 PM...
    okey, I don't know why I have said this all here, but in fact, I just wanted to point out once again that this poem is the highlight of my day - and probably whole week
    it's way more then words can say... so I'll just applaud


  • tanzanite
    January 25, 2006
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    I do not know what to say. You have left me breathless and aching for more - just like you usually do. I love the way you write in whispers that is caught in every cell as you read. I love the emotion and the breathlessness I encounter in reading your work. This is another awesomely creative and beautiful write from the most prolific poet I know of in this country.


  • just rob gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    This is a love poem from a garden. The whisper, the breath of it is like a clean breeze there. The last three lines finish it with a nuance that will echo long after the read. Perfect!
    Peace, Rob


  • LunacyxxFringe
    January 25, 2006
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    Wow I like it...The word choice is wonderful, the picture, although I don't really see what it is, ties the poem together beautifully. keep up the good work!

  • messier1133
    January 25, 2006
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    very well done

    I like the descriptive use of words in this piece. It really creates a good picture in my head, of the surroundings and all that is. Well done=)


  • astralshepherd gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    yeah, see! this is what hearts who are close to the center of love's furnace look like! i hope more pay close attention to the originality contained here. blessings and best wishes, ~richard


  • Dienush
    January 25, 2006
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    Wow. I think this poem could make anyone fall in love... Since I'm already more than in love, I can't but relate to it. I love the idea... You always start with such unique ideas and find so many things to relate love too. I like that.

  • Judas Christian
    January 25, 2006
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    a very sweet and unique piece you've put together here. we learn something new every day! well done.


  • untouched pages
    January 25, 2006
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    This a a very Chilling write. It has amazing imagery, as well wonderful diction!!! Snaps gose to your for this amazing write, good job!! I love the way if flows, and its plain and simple. Great write i think i might just head over and look at more of your work
    ~Cris~


  • greeneyedmuse
    January 25, 2006
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    spooky, yet beaoutiful. kudos to you for being simple and using the "bare bones" of the piece. keep up the great write.
    ~sammy


  • Madd Hatter
    January 25, 2006
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    great

    That was beautiful! I loved it! The flow of this piece was wonderful as is the imagery

  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, Poetalaina for the lovely comment - glad you liked the whisper... ~


  • Poetalaina
    January 25, 2006
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    Adored it

    A stunningly beautiful write. I had to read it three times and just take it all in. I commend you on the perfection of its flow and the imagery placed so effortlessly. Lovely piece, and fantastic job! Thanks for sharing.


  • MovingMountains
    January 25, 2006
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    This is very descriptive, yet discreet in that it is so quiet. This is a very good write.

  • Moniqarlet
    January 25, 2006
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    good job


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, dear Rowan...if you can dream it, you can do it - I am sure of that. Best wishes

  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, Paula - the word just whispered to me... !


  • poet2angels gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Beautiful, Beautiful, Beautiful......You again wrote a awesome poem! Good luck in the contest!...Paula ...(Lynda


  • wishintreeUK
    January 25, 2006
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    Excellent poem!

    A truly beautiful poem, your words convey your thoughts with ease for your reader to follow, giving your poem excellent flow from beginning to end. A beautiful, romantic piece of writing, well done!

    ~Katie~


  • Sitara
    January 25, 2006
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    So softly beautiful and romantic.A very descriptive and nice poem filled with hushed up whispers and sweet nothings shared between deep lovers.truly enchanting with great words and picturisation of loves environment

  • sad-but-true
    January 25, 2006
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    Excellent write here! I have never seen such a poem like this. I love the visuals that you portray in it and the picture goes so well with it. Let your heart whisper the soft words and your soul paint the pictures,then and only then will your quille forever be on the silk following thier lead. Awsome write here, I loved it! ~val~


  • angelofthecentury
    January 25, 2006
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    that was awesome and i agree very descriptive i dont know if it was meant but it seemed to be a bit erotia here and there but it sounded good well good luck in the contest.......-cassie

  • Rowan gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    No one writes about love like you Nicolette!
    You have such an elegance and beauty in writing,that I can only dream of achieving!
    Absolutely lovely!


  • joybug
    January 25, 2006
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    awesome emotion

    A beautiful description of how it feels to have your love whisper sweet endearments. The feeling of how it stirs your soul. Very good write, touching emotional. Awesome!

  • dean1974
    January 25, 2006
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    first class

    now this is excellent. the sensual imagery, the use of powerful colour. alliteration used well throughout the piece. absolutely breathtaking. i felt as though i was the subject of the piece briefly, this surely is the sort of connection that all writers crave with their audience. A beautifully written assault on ALL of my senses. thank u. it has restored my faith in life for at least another day!!

  • Buchan
    January 25, 2006
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    excellent

    What a unique poem. So well expressed,So different.Your poem is wonderful in so many ways ..Especially the way you crafted the words. Thank you for sharing.


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Thank you, Steve...and I truly love it that you adore this! Maybe the whisper emerges from the "bokkie voices"... Love and hugs


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Gennelle, thank you very much - I appreciate the compliments. I wanted to give the "whisper" the soft sounds it "deserves"! ~


  • quietly burning
    January 25, 2006
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    u say "a word" that drops slowly ... then in this poetry there is proof of the "cause/effect, action/reaction. equal/opposite conservation of energy" etc etc etc
    as i just told u now, the last two days in my mind i have pictured the falling submersion and then the upward recoil. I think u took this beautifully into the forum of lovers

    "it falls and breaks and spreads its water -
    soft of syllable and resonance it trickles
    down my hair, and within me"

    this is fabulous poetry sweetheart that i truly adore

    love steve


  • Maatkara gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Beautiful expression and deft use of language, Nicolette!
    Your metaphors are as exquisite as ever; alliteration and assonance give it such a soft sound - straight from the heart.

    ~Gen

  • Nicolette gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Smiles...thank you, Helen


  • natari gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    I just read Wanda and now both of you have made my day begin on a lovely note.This poem is so wonderfully crafted.I can feel the intensity of love here.Bravo Helen

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