I stand alone,
amidst the ruins—
covered in ebon soot.
Embers smolder,
remnants of dreams—
that deception took.
I watched the fire burning,
an inferno, my body withstood.
As my heart and soul,
were devoured by flames.
Consumed—
like bone-dry wood
Stone cold cinders sting my eyes,
As the roar of hopelessness rings in my head.
The taste of ashes is strong upon my tongue.
Scorched and seared,
my body aches.
Agonizing sorrow—
has only just begun.
Gone…
I whisper through parched lips.
The tears refuse to come
How could a love that blazed so bright—
Devastate someone?
In the wreckage –
Nothing,
No trace left of my dreams,
the essence of my spirit lost,
no hint of devotion seen.
I felt them all incinerate,
as I survived the heat.
Now I stand here—
Desolate.
Debris piled at my feet.
Author notes
Written February 1st, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Fire to Ashes by BurnYourWings.
300 points, ended February 11, 2005, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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A very poignant poem which genuinely affected
This is a very cleverly worded depiction of utter desolation and despair,reinforced by astute metaphoric imagery that scorches the reader who is lured into the pained and bewildered mind of the writer.I truly felt your dismay at the betrayal,the broken trust and promises.My poem "Looking Back" is based on the same theme. Well done. camus -
WOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW very well wrighten
my favorite part in this wright is
I watched the fire burning,
an inferno, my body withstood.
As my heart and soul,
were devoured by flames.
Consumed—
like bone-dry wood
thinks for sharing this with my family and i
i hope to read more oh i almost for got again
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This is a truely great poem. very good imagery, like I was the one being burned thank you fo sharing such a wonderful piece. good luck.
~*~Kelly Sue~*~ -
GREAT POEM
WOW!! I love this poem its very well written, please keep on writing.
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wow this is an interesting little piece, but well written if I might add. I think that you have talent and i'd like to hear more from you
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I really really enjoyed the imagery you put into this! And the interesting writing form was a nice touch! My favorite like was this one: "The taste of ashes is strong upon my tongue." because that was such a creative way f looking at it!
Thanks for entering!
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