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The Deed




Use me, abuse me
 Do as you please
 Give me what you got
 I love when you tease



 

Make me hot
Make me wet
Make this a night
I won't forget


Lay me down
Make me sigh
Trace my curves
Spread my thighs


Rub my breasts
Kiss my neck
Beneath your touch
I'm a wreck


Take me here
And make it rough
Take me now
Til you've had enough


Tie my wrists
Behind my back
 Keep me helpless
While you attack


Give it to me hard
Give it to me fast
Bend me over
Spank my ass


Don't slow down
I want more
Tonight's the night
I'm your whore


Step right up
Dip it in
Feels so good
Must be sin


 

Straddle my ass
Nice and high
Make me scream,
Gasp, pant and cry


Make me beg
Make me plead
Grab my hips
Do the deed




 

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Written January 24th, 2006

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  • Blazing White Wolf
    May 6, 2006
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    The Deed as a owner I have the deed and will exercise its many opitions when desired ok what is the stirring I feel?
    love and light
    blaze


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    April 18, 2006
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    Whoo! Now that, my dear, was something else! It was very visual, and filled with emotion, and I felt for your character... Beautiful write, and take care!
    Fare thee well!
    Laura xo


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    April 18, 2006
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    Excellent write. I really enjoyed reading this. It brought alot of images to my mind..Great picture as well. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • Soul-2-Soul
    March 31, 2006
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    erection section please! lol..i love that picture and the poem itself is pure pleasure. i love seeing one give themselves to their partner...its such a turn on to have someone do anything you want...for me its always been me willing to do for the pleasures of the others, its a fantasy that i have to have my own personal whore though i don't know if i would be used to having my way with someone just for the sake of my pleasure.

    shhhhhhhhhhhh i didn't say that...lol

    excellent write.


  • Lucky-Charm
    March 30, 2006
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    PERFECT

    OH< MY GOD!!!! Where do I begin...You got to the point and wasted no time doing so! Words can't describe this one.All I can say is it's PERFECT!!


  • Abscessed
    March 7, 2006
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    OMG i was just going through some of the reading in the sins of passion reading list and this one has just pushed me over the edge. to call this HOT would be an understatment..it was just sooooooooooooo good. The picture for one was a real turn on...the derriere closeup was just really appropriate for such raunchy content. Also the poem with its bondage and small bursts of passion was mind blowing!!!
    absolutely brilliant write..im so happy ive got a chance to read such amazing work... thank you for that!
    hope to read more of your pieces soon
    stolen1985


  • Celticmoon
    January 27, 2006
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    Thank you Unco
    Glad you enjoyed this piece


  • Unco-Numen
    January 27, 2006
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    WHEW! GEE! GULP! LIONS AND TIGERS AND BEARS...HE CRIES!

    This write makes me s q u i r..........................m (GOTCHA!)

    From the beginning picture which creates a stark erotic edge...you continue to hone with sexual precision a razor like image of raw passionate loving...clear to HER very end.

    BRAVO...I can't help but applaud a woman who receives great pleasure from wanting to pleasure her man...any way he wants.

    This is E-ticket erotica!

    Lanny

  • sad-but-true
    January 25, 2006
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    WOW! Nicely said! I came over to take a look on the word of Krystal Moonlight, she was right this is excellent! I'm glad I came over to take a look see. Keep it up as I know you will. Thanks for sharing this one. Rest assured that I will be mentioning this one to all on my favorites. ~val~


  • Catressa gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    Heated write you.. shew.. fanning face..


  • Celticmoon
    January 25, 2006
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  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    January 25, 2006
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    OK Sis... what am I going to do with you.... besides see if we can find a publisher for your work... This deserves to be on the market for you making money. The two of us could create ALOT of havoc in society with our work in print. So think about it hon... just think about it.

  • flyingspur
    January 25, 2006
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    big turn on

    this is superb..the visuals from the picture down are amazing...really raunchy and in your face...loved it...hope you get chance to read mine....dougie


  • Celticmoon
    January 24, 2006
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    You.....speechless???????

    WOW!
    I didn't think that was posible


  • Always Deena
    January 24, 2006
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    I am speechless...I know thats a first. Gotta find some toys! I hope he knows what he is in for... I hope he likes it
    Much Love,
    Deena


  • Tony El Great silver member
    January 24, 2006
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    Now that's what we call just getting down to it, the basics of all kinds of different fun; and what is wrong with that? Nothing!......Oh yes, I liked the pic too.

  • Celticmoon
    January 24, 2006
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    The gentlness that you feel within this piece comes from the fact it was written for someone I love. This is just one example of what I would like to do for him and him for me.


  • Mandy Pants
    January 24, 2006
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    first off, very provocative picture but good poem i love the rhyme you used, and tho its pretty dirty it still seems gently written, dont ask, its just what i got out of it.

  • Celticmoon
    January 24, 2006
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    Feel free to copy it and show your hubby.
    I hope he likes it and hope you get what you so desire my dear.


    Enjoy!


  • Krystal Moonlight
    January 24, 2006
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    This is great! I have been trying to get this across to my husband...would you mind if I copied this for him to read? You will get the credit of the poem..I will hopefully get this night! LOL!

    I really enjoyed the flow of this piece. It is written very well! Detailed, but not overly-so. A definite "pleasure"!! Keep up the great work!


  • Celticmoon
    January 24, 2006
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    Hehe.. thanks sis


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 24, 2006
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    Hot, sexy, and sultry sister! Wow This guy sure is gonna be quite lucky when he gets hold of you! Love ya

  • sensual-poetress
    January 24, 2006
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    oh my god you made me wte reading that poem its detailed and to the point i hope your man fulfilled every desire

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