I catch myself dreaming
Wandering through the daze
Guided so by those things gleaming
Hoping it's just a phase
For our days may soon be ending
Though we cannot know how long
Because time is not for lending
We must continue to be strong
Our worldly things will go away
And our strength we share with brothers
As we learn to live life day by day
Share our faith for the sake of others
Author notes
What value is there in the rewards of life if we can't share them with others? I hope you enjoy this poem and ask for your feedback.
Written January 24th, 2006
A contest entry
- Inspiration please! anything goes! by woman onamision.
650 points, ended February 25, 2006, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi Susan:
You make it so easy to say thank you! So I'll complicate it a bit and say thank you very much! I appreciate and endorse all that you added in your comments.
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It is so easy in this society to get caught up in the me me me of it all. Needing the bigger house and the bigger car and all that goes with it. But what is it that Job said?
Job 1:21. He said, "Naked I came from my mother's womb,
And naked I shall return there.
The LORD gave and the LORD has taken away.
Blessed be the name of the LORD."
The things of this life make it comfortable, but Money and stuff cannot buy happiness, only comfortable misery. I think I would rather be safe and clothed and have good friends and family over all the earthly riches of the world. -
Hi John:
I think you should have written this poem. You are so eloquent in your comments and with such beauty in your praise, you deserve to have written this. Thank you very much and I do hope they can leave thinking they can give something of themselves for the sake of others. I choose to think you are right that by teaching all, all can reach. I appreciate your comments very much. Bill -
Hi Kay:
Thank you very much for your wonderful comments. I couldn't agree more with your second comment. If we do not, then who will spread the news. I appreciate you taking the time to comment. Bill -
Hi sweetanjil:
What wonderful comments you have given for this poem. No greater honor can be given than when you are quoted by others. You make me very pleased that I was able to pen this poem. Thank you very much! Bill -
Perfectly written and so true. I loved how you expressed the greatest things we share. and i liked the part.
Our worldly things will go away
And our strength we share with brothers
As we learn to live life day by day
Share our faith for the sake of others
You did a wonderful job.Thank you for sharing this magnificent piece. Keep penning and good luck in all you do dear friend -
well done. nice lesson given here. you reach out to all that look for your words and they leave feeling they can give something of themselves in the sake of helping someone. our poetry is wisdom born from the depths of sadness and the heights of hope. keep teaching then we can all reach..
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This is wonderfully and thoughtfully written. We must spread the faith for the sake of others. Excellent message that is put in a way that slides through the mind. KAY
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Hi riverflow:
All I can say is WOW! What a wonderful message to get about a poem I have written. From the bottom of my heart, THANK YOU!
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moving
This poem sounds like it has promise for a very good song, I really liked it. The flow tied it nicely together, it made sense but still left the reader to fill in their own parts, and it just sounded inspirational. I don't mean just an inspiration for poetry, but something deeper. I don't know what it was about this, but it was very moving. -
Hi Nocturn:
You can comment on my writing any time. I do appreciate your kind and thoughtful comments. Makes a writer feel good to receive comments such as yours. Thank you!
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Hi dead poet83:
Your thoughts and comments are much appreciated. I guess if I looked at most of my writing, I would say that I try to be a little more to the point and not so embellishing. I guess they would call that part of my style, whether good or bad. I do take note of your comments though and they will cause me to look at what I write in the future. Thank you.
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Hi ScarletPhantomFaery:
I appreciate your comments, especially that this was an uplifting write. I try to strive to make my poetry uplifting. Doesn't always work, but I appreciate those words from you on this poem. Thank you!
Bill -
Gracefully written and a wonderful thought-provoking messege. I like how the rhyme adds so much to the thoughtful tone and easy manner of this piece.
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Hi Wolf of Night:
I appreciate your insight. I can only say that I am counting on this being the right message. Thank you for yours and know I appreciate your wonderful insight and comments. Bill -
I give it a 6.2
Not too bad. The beat kept itself through the whole poem. Maybe a bit more imagery would be nice. Something i try not to do is use wrods like "things", and "it" a lot. Spend more time embellishing what you want to say verses trying to make it fit into a nice neat rhyme. -
Hi Joyce:
You know how to make a writer feel good about what they have written. Thank you for your wonderful comments and as time goes on, life can only get better. Thanks again.
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Hi Word--Warrior:
I do appreciate your kind and thoughtful comments. Many wonderful things written in only a few words. Thank you very much. Bill
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Hi Chucklingllama:
Nice pen name! I really appreciate your wonderful comments. Gives value to me, thus encourages me in my writing. Thank you very much. Bill -
Hi selfconsciouspoet:
Short and sweet, your comments are music to my ears. Thank you. Bill -
This is uplifting! One would hope that every person could achieve faith, whether in himself or in a religon or in any aspect that makes him joyful..
Great poem and good luck
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Hi mzladyt:
Thank you for your wonderful comments. It is gratifying to know the message you hoped to convey, was the message received by others. Thank you again.
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Hi amazonia-gw:
I appreciate your wonderful comments. It feels good when poets tell you they apprecite your writing. Thank you.
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Excellent
This is the standerd clasic poem.I like what you have written.Very thought provoking,and you did it so well.keep up the good works. -
Great piece I have to say that this is sending the same messages I keep hearing ever since christmas I keep hearing it over and over in different ways surely the calling is strong and I must obey great write
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Wow, how right this poem is! I never worry about worldly possesions because i know you can;t take them with you when you die. I like this poem, it was realy nice.
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Eloquent
Eloquent language and just the right length to stay very easily readable for the general audience! Loved the subject matter and the sentiment partially hidden (it seems) within the framework!
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This is a very profound poem. It is extremely well written and I enjoyed it very much.
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i like it. i like the whole feel of it.
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Very well said. I totally believe it is soon to come for the ending of days. Great job
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Hi Wilsonak:
You caught me off guard, as I was not expecting to see a comment so quickly. I really do appreciate your generous comment and plan to return the favor by reading your Miracle. Thanks again and you can visit my scribblings any time.
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WOW
I loved this,it was a joy to read.A really great write,well done.
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