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Pure Blues

Theres something about the way
  the words float throughout
 this song,
   that makes me see those eyes.
That peircing blue gaze,
  sending oh-so familar chills
     down my spine.
Whatever happend
   to the way you used to look
 at the tainted flesh
    upon this body,
 as if you were looking
     at pure virgin skin,
     without a sin upon it.

Author notes

I dont know if its done or not. But it sucks.
Written January 23rd, 2006

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  • mysticlabyrinth
    January 24, 2006
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    i think its done and it DOESNT suck one single bit! i love it. i wouldnt change a thing

  • twofacedbeauty
    January 24, 2006
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    aww this does not suck i love it great job babe !
    xoxo

  • sweetheart4rain
    January 24, 2006
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    that was beautiful babe!.. i luv this line the best
    at pure virgin skin,
    without a sin upon it.
    luv ya lots
    -Britt


  • Painted Warrior
    January 24, 2006
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    what are you taling about "it sucks" this is a great poem!!! I like it. great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • MadSkittlesBri
    January 23, 2006
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    wow, i... i-I... I like it! lol its good! <3

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