I tried to write a masterpiece
words wreathing upon the polymer page.
I dripped the ink on the stark white starched slips
of some old paper I had found
littering the attic.
I figured the paper would give it attitude
ambiance…
The pen leaked and left a large blot
bubbling my words.
Ooooh; effervescent expressions.
Just what I need to make my work stand out.
And I continued to write.
Liberal lexis - twisted terminology
I’m still learning the lingo.
But it looks pretty on the velum pages.
I scrawl it out like chicken scratch
with my calligraphy pen.
All for the entertainment of a few critics
whose credentials intimidate me.
I really don’t give a rat’s ass if they like my work.
I write for love of the language.
A religious like rapture‘s
imparted through poetry.
I get off on:
Tangling text in sweaty sheets.
My thoughts to often
getting lost in a labyrinth
of peripatetic patois.
Should I really care?
That no one “gets” me?
Hell no!
If they don’t care enough
to search for the deeper meaning.
To look up a few ambiguous words
That I spangled in the nebulous tomes
trying to add atmosphere
and essence
to the body of my work
then I bloody well; don’t care.
I tried to write a masterpiece
and then I realized
sometimes it’s better
to speak in tongues.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 23, 2006
Author notes
Don't ask me where this came from. More ramblings from a woman who can't sleep. LOL Please feel free to let me know what you really think. I'm a big girl and I can take criticism. Patti
Written January 23rd, 2006
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A contest entry
- Everything (contest) by Odds and Ends.
400 points, ended February 13, 2006, 35 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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I must say that thus far this is one of the best entries in this contest. (by the way, sorry it's taken a while for me to get back to everyone). You had GREAT voice in this piece. Your form was amazing. You were creative and out there, yet still in enough in earth's atmosphere for me not to float away. Love this.
Suggestion for future writes: Because I think you're more seasoned that other writers here, I think it would be awesome to see you experiment in different forms. Just to be sparatic in your form. But, that's neither here nor there.
Enough of my rambling. I hope to see you in the next phase of this contest. -
loved it
I love the first 9 lines! They had me trapped in the poem.
I often write about why or how I write... And it's for the poet himself or herself, you said it.
It is wonderful though when someone completely gets your poem, even if they may find a different meaning than you intended!
Good job, keep rambling, sometimes when you can't sleep is when you let go and relax the mind to let loose the words... -
love ur point, to hell with wut everyone else thinks, this should be for yourself and no one else!! good job!!
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great
Patti, what a wonderful and very expressive piece you've written with this one. I think you speak for many of us. Expression is in that of the writer's mind and pen. This is also done with pose and grace, and at times a little blunt, but then again I think that that was the intent of it. this was very enjoyable and artfully written. image and Visions -
loved it, great, good, yay, ok get my point .
thats very nice, very honest, please do rambel on somemore tell the world how you feel and let people know you will not take the bullshit! -
that is a mighty title! this is my favorite part:
Tangling text in sweaty sheets.
My thoughts to often
getting lost in a labyrinth
of peripatetic patois.
Should I really care?
That no one “gets” me?
wonderful write, am glad i got to read this. you have the right attitude, if no one gets you who cares. write on! -
We have to agree with one of our poet friends above; writing is good therapy for the soul.."chicken soup" for the soul if you will and whatever spills forth is a sharing of the soul. Uniquely penned...we liked it
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Outstanding Piece
Very nice write. havent we all been through the trials and tribulations of trying to creat the Masterpiece? I too write for my own gratification.If by chance a reader likes or can identify with what I have written, then so much the better.The mere fact that writing soothes me, and allows me to vent my feelings is good enough for me. Thank You for sharing and keep up the great poeting..Andy -
very awesome....
very nicely done! wow...not much more than i can add to everything the other commentors have said but man this was great! it had its own flow to it and was just awesome! keep it up!
Protee -
In theory I agree... but the point was not that I couldn't take criticism from the critics only that I would not write strictly to please them. Some critics take pleasure in telling a person that their work has no merit, because they don’t have fancy credentials, or they don’t meet their narrow idea of what a poem is. Those were the critic’s that I was raging against. Not the one’s who strive to help someone improve their writing thru honest edits that will improve grammar, spelling, flow or meter… Besides if I write to please others first I think I loose the power behind my words. But this poem is mostly about discovering that I care more about saying what I want to, then I do about others liking what I say. I write for me. It pleases me when my words touch someone else, but even if no one else cared for my work I’d still write. Thank you for commenting. Patti
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The process of writing is therapy in itself, helping us through tough times and lending an ear to the happenings of the world around us. We write for ourselves, but for others to read. It does not matter if they like what we write, but I think criticism of any work helps one see their work in a different light - maybe we can explain it better, use different words to express ourselves - improve in our skills. Everyone will get something else out of your work, because they have diferent experiences. Enjoyed the form used here - flows well and says it like you feel it is. The last four lines are wonderful! RAMBLE ON...
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great
I liked this poem and agree with the part about writing for "yourself" for whatever reasons make you happy. I don't necessarily agree with the attitude of the hell with everyone else. especially when you are posting your writing on a site that encourages and allows others to give their opinion. we both know that those opinions aren't always nice. I think the secret is in finding a way to weed through the negativity and finding the constructive criticism that can be helpful and useful without causing harm to others. I think your poem was well written. you show much talent. i appreciate your willingness to share. Your spunky personality will serve you well when channeled in a positive direction. best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do. I hope this new year is treating you well. god bless and take care. peace always in all ways. -
EXCELLENT
LOVE THIS WELL WRITTEN.TOTALLY AGREE WITH THE ATTITUDE IT'S ABOUT A LOVE OF THE LANGUAGE AND TO HELL WITH WHAT OTHERS MIGHT THINK.ON YOUR WAVELENGTH ALL THE WAY. -
Ramble on woman!!! THis is great. It is so emotional!! I liked it alot! This is a great piece!! I enjoyed reading it! I hope to read more of your work in the future. Great write... and keep rambling!
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