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Disappear

Somedays
I want to stop caring
Wash the worries away
And just give up
But life wont allow it
The questions keep coming
Burdening every breath
Please make it stop
Let me step away
From myself
Break this routine
Please let me
disappear

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Written January 22nd, 2006

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  • Deadsmelly
    February 18, 2006
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    short and simple

    Creative with the colors and stuff. Short and simple. I'm glad you don't disapper I'd be hard to find you again and you could play so many pracical jokes . Good job!


  • justanothersadsongx
    February 10, 2006
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    oo i like it it's really good, depressing, but good :]


  • rower4life
    January 24, 2006
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    GAH!! Asheroonie... these are always so sad, and yet always so freaking amazing that i cant say anything about them that isnt praise !!! not only do you have talent with actually writing the poem itself, but you make it so visually attractive, to the point that im just totally drawn into reading it!!! Its so descriptive and every single line just flows perfectly into the next... like, its so dependent and yet completely independent of everything else... if that makes any sense to anyone else by myself !! this poem was really impacting!!!! i wish i had the talent to make a poem short and actually have it mean something instead of just blabbing about absolutely nothing at all !!!! EVERY... LINE... WAS... FLAWLESS!!! amazing, *bows down to you and falls on her face* impressively well done !!!


  • Flightless Raven
    January 23, 2006
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    >D< Me luffles you, this piece was awesome, but i hope you feel happier..


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Interesting way you have made the words fade and disappear at the end. Think we can all relate to this, some days jut wanting to do nothing, but blend in and have no one notice we're there - well written,.


  • DarkChildsKiss silver member
    January 22, 2006
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    OW! I really like this. I love what you did to the colors! Creative! Great Write!


  • SpiritMother
    January 22, 2006
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    Good JOB

    Beautifully sad AND I did like the way you used the colors to make it just fade out. I'm out of applause at this time but will keep you in mind til later.


  • brokenbeauty921
    January 22, 2006
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    Wow. I think the way you used the font colors made such a big impact on how the poem came out! How at the end you wrote "Disappear", actually disappearing, so that the R doesn't show up, it was pure genious! Great write also! I really enjoyed reading it, and it was an awesome idea!
    Elyse

  • brokenangel12
    January 22, 2006
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    this is wonderful i like the way you had use your words,it was short but right to the point.keep it because your doin a fanstic job.

  • raconteur27
    January 22, 2006
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    I loved the color effects you used on the lines! I thought it backed up the emotion of the poem really well. Keep up the good stuff


  • CarCrashHumor
    January 22, 2006
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    ooooooo this is trippy! i like it, thats so cool how you wrote it like that, i like the lines "I want to stop caring
    Wash the worries away
    And just give up
    But life wont allow it" cause its so true..great write!! xx- Crash

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