Dreams begin with the ending of the tears
Brought on by fears in one’s earliest years
As we begin in our skin the newborn baby cries
Not having had the time to become wise
The unknown we’ve outgrown when
We later learn how to begin
To see that life is overcoming sin.
Through love of God and each other we win.
Success and happiness in life derive
From application when your dreams made real arrive
Dreams begin with the ending of the tears
Brought on by wisdom in one’s later years
Ellis
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Written January 22nd, 2006
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this was a great message
i realy like this poem
and i liked it as a whole no parts better than another
very beautiful
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beautiful
I learn so much from your writing. It is indeed very nicely penned. Thank you. -
This is a good poem. Again I like the repeated line. It emphasizes the meaning of the poem. I keep on dreaming, but at times it is hard to believe. When I am not depressed, I struggle forward.
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Innocence has it's own rule.Nice one you've penned.~~Suseann
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Now this is a marvelous write. You've conquered the dread beast, meter. The rhymes are perfect too, so you've really accomplished something. I am not that good with meter myself, although I think I'm certainly doing okay. It's just not the easiest thing to work with. Anyway, the premise here is the heighth of verisimilitude, and you've expounded on it very well. All in all, good job.
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Hi,
I'm not a great believer in sin, and it doesn't sound like you are either by your poem. We are all ignorant children to begin ~ That gives us lots of room for growth in this life.
Clear wise words always have value. Good poem
Tara
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